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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Up and Down (04/02/09)

TITLE: Quink and Fadley in Quizzletown
By Betty Castleberry
04/07/09


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Old Quizzletown buzzed;
The Quizzles sang songs.
They rhymed all their rhymes
And banged on their gongs.

Quizzles ask questions,
They ask them a lot.
They ask who is who
Then ask what is what

Fleegles aren’t Quizzles,
They don’t smile much.
They’re a bit snobbish
And cranky and such

Their habits are strange,
They stand on their heads.
Then they sleep backwards
When they’re in their beds

Fadley the Fleegle,
A not so nice chum,
Laughed at the Quizzles
And called them all dumb.

“I live upside down,
It’s just what I do.
It makes me better
And smarter than you.”

A Quizzle named Quink,
A very smart chap,
Listened, then put on
His new thinking cap.

“If I stand on my head;
Flip up on my crown,
Then down will be up
And up will be down.

“I’ll be just like you
There won’t be a doubt;
My head to the ground
And toes pointed out.”

Then Fadley got mad;
His face turned bright pink.
He fussed and he yelled;
He created a stink.

He stomped and he cried,
“You’ll stand on your feet.
Don’t do what I do.
You’re just not that neat.”

Quink flipped right over,
His head in the dust,
“I’ll do what you do,
I just simply must.

“If you’re up or your down,
Or you wear pink or green;
That won’t make you neat.
You see what I mean?

“What’s in your insides;
And what you can’t see,
Is what really counts,
And what you will be.”

Fadley tried smiling,
But it looked like a frown.
He nearly forgot
He was upside down.

“You might be right, Quink.
I’ve not been too nice.
I’ll stand on my feet
Why, I’ll do it twice.”

Fadley flipped over,
And up his head went.
His feet hit the ground;
They touched the cement.

Now Fadley was up,
And Quink was still down.
They laughed and they laughed
‘Til they thought they’d drown.

Quink questioned Fadley,
“Who’s up and who’s down?
It doesn’t matter.
We’ve turned things around.”

Fadley was happy,
It showed on his face,
They made Quizzletown
A happier place.


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Lynda Schultz 04/09/09
This is super—somehow reminded me of Dr. Seuss.
Ruth Ann Moore04/09/09
I agree with Lynda. Your story is excellent. I enjoyed the read greatly.
Charla Diehl 04/09/09
Yes, Dr. Seuss came to my mind too as I read this entertaining poem with a simple but important message to all. Great job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/09/09
This is very clever, while still managing to give an important message. I love the creativity.
Debbie Roome 04/09/09
Comic and entertaining - would love to see it illustrated.
Beth LaBuff 04/09/09
This was so much fun to read. I love the town and people you created. I want to see pictures too. I especially like the smile that was a frown because he was upside down. Great use of the topic!
Lynda Lee Schab 04/11/09
This is the second entry I've read and commented on that reminded me of Dr. Seuss. Very fun read!
Carol Slider 04/12/09
How fun and creative! I thought of Lewis Carroll when I was reading it (and, yes, Dr. Seuss, too). Great job!!
Jan Ackerson 04/12/09
The meter and the rhyme scheme match the tone and message of this delightful poem perfectly!
Joanne Sher 04/12/09
ABsolutely delightful, Betts! Definitely had a Seussish feel.
Karlene Jacobsen 04/12/09
Call me crazy, I like Dr. Seuss rhymes. This reminds me of that. Loved it.
Shelley Ledfors 04/12/09
I love this! Very charming, and, as many have said very like Dr. Seuss (which I love). Great poem / message. I'd love to see it illustrated.
Chely Roach04/12/09
What a blast...I adore snappy little "fun" poems. Loved this!
Connie Dixon04/12/09
Very creative - fun entry. I enjoyed the rhythm and the message.! Good job
Bryan Ridenour04/13/09
I read Dr. Seuss to my kids a lot. They will enjoy hearing this as well. Well done!
Sheri Gordon04/13/09
So cute--very much like Dr. Suess, and that's a huge compliment. I could picture this illustrated like Dr. Suess' books. Great job with the topic.
Myrna Noyes04/14/09
Shades of Dr. Seuss, indeed!! :) Very nice job of rhyming and story telling with a great message as the "topper"!
Loren T. Lowery04/14/09
It is nice to see that your ability to tell good, amusing stories transfers so well into the poetry genre, too. This would be fun to see illustrated!
Beckie Stewart04/15/09
Reads like a Dr. Seuss story which are still my favorite to read in the world at 47 years old!!
Mona Purvis04/15/09
Read it to Bill. Put a real smile on his face as he sipped his morning coffee. Creative and so much fun. You are so good at finding where the humor lives.
Mona
Pamela Kliewer04/15/09
Yep, I immediately thought of Dr. Seuss too. Great, fun read with a wonderful message.
Peter Stone04/16/09
Very amusing, and with a great message. Reminded me of the 'Phantom Tollbooth' a bit, my favorite kids book.
Deborah Engle 06/28/12
Dr Suess would be proud. You've done a fine job. Thanks for the grin.