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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of A Bird in the Hand is Worth Two in the Bush (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/10/08)

TITLE: A Sad, Sad Saga of Dissatisfaction
By Verna Cole Mitchell
01/12/08


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With hand stuck in the cookie jar,
One cookie on the floor,
The wee lad cried and told his mom,
I wanted to get more.

"Please read two stories, pled the boy
When it was time for bed.
Ones not enough, he told his dad,
So he got none instead.

Discarding his old wooden bat
Because he wanted new,
The teen did not have funds enough;
With baseball he was through

While fishing, he kept throwing back
The tiny fish he caught.
Hed had enough to make a meal,
But he went home with naught.

His girl would have been satisfied
With any ring hed buy,
But while he saved for flashy one,
She found another guy.

When tempted by the lottery,
He gambled with his cash.
The castles in the air hed built
Went tumbling with a crash.

He sold his lovely little house;
He found it far too small,
Then put his money in a scheme
And sadly lost it all.

When old age came, as age will do,
He'd reason to regret
For thinking what he had was not
As good as he could get.

He never realized the truth
The Bible makes so plain:
When added on to godliness,
Contentment is great gain.*

* paraphrase of I Timothy 6:6 NKJV


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LauraLee Shaw01/17/08
LOVE your title, and I was tapping my toe to the rhythm. Great rhyming!
Jan Ackerson 01/18/08
Fantastic! So many perfect illustrations of the topic, a verse that ties it all together, and a poem that was a pleasure to read.
Bonnie Way01/18/08
Excellent poem! I like the rhythm and the stories in the poem - great lesson. :)
Jacqueline Zerres01/18/08
I absolutely loved this! How sad, though, to go through life missing the best hoping for the better.
Marita Vandertogt01/19/08
I'm thinking this guy might be the perfect definition of a "loser" - literally. Nice flow to the poem and an enjoyable read.
Donna Emery01/20/08
I love this poem and its simple, but eloquent message. Well written and very nice to read.
Karen Wilber 01/21/08
Excellent writing. This is great in that you told so many different stories on topic then tied it up in the end. The stanza about the ring was my favorite. Ouch! And the 2nd to last one about old age. Wonderful.
Dee Yoder 01/22/08
Wonderful verse that is right on topic and full of colorful descriptions. You created a vivid portrait of someone who was never content with what he had.
Holly Westefeld01/22/08
A finely crafted poem.
So sad he never learned the lesson.
Debbie Wistrom01/22/08
Don't usually read the poems, but your rhythm worked for me and I enjoy it so much, expecially the scripture tie in. THANKS.
Sheri Gordon01/22/08
This is wonderful. The poem was very fun to read, and I really liked the example after example format. Great job with the topic.
Julie Ruspoli01/22/08
Oh how special. I loved reading this. Great message and flow. What a fun poem. Keep writing for Him!
Joanne Sher 01/22/08
Each stanza is a wonderful little snippet that I could picture so vividly. Excellent showing of the topic, and the rhyme and meter are, as always, just right.
Joy Faire Stewart01/22/08
Perfect illustration of topic. I like the way it was carried through the poem.
Linda Watson Owen01/22/08
This witty, wonderful, right on topic poem is such a delight! Love the lilting rhythm, the skillfully woven rhyme, and the deep, practical advice. Great poem!
Lisa Graham01/23/08
I read this aloud and loved it. The rhythm is perfect. Excellent job with topic.
Loren T. Lowery01/23/08
You never cease to amaze me with your consistency to come up with grand poems to express the topic of the week. It has to a gift and I want to thank-you for sharing it.
Sara Harricharan 01/24/08
So glad I got to read this! I like the easy way you take us through this fellow's life, ending with the last verse that was my favorite of all. Great job and Congrats on your win! ^_^
Beth LaBuff 01/24/08
Verna -- Congrats!!! Excellent illustrations and so well written. Your last stanza was PERFECT.
LauraLee Shaw01/24/08
Congratulations on this satisfying win! It is a celebrative saga.
Sheri Gordon01/24/08
Congratulations on your EC, Verna. This is very, very good.
Sharlyn Guthrie01/24/08
Such wonderful truth here! Congratulations on your EC!
Edy T Johnson 01/24/08
What a splendid poem, so very on topic, and I love the punch line Scripture reminder. This goes in my favorites, and I'm tickled pink to see you won the judges' attention to boot. Congratulations, friend!
Mariane Holbrook01/27/08
I absolutely LOVE THIS! It's so clever, so adorable, so full of truth, so original that I am trying to find a way to erase your name and insert mine as the author. (So far, no luck).

It seems to me you get "betterer and betterer" all the time. And you can tell I don't, because of my spelling! You're the best!
Melanie Smith-Taylor02/01/08
This poem is excellent, catchy, well written and I love seeing that it is based on Scripture. I will add it to my favorites. Thanks for writing it.
Janice Fitzpatrick10/29/09
After reading your latest winning entry for the challenge I had to go back and read several of your pieces. This is one of my favorites, as it is such a great lesson put within a humorous poem, that flows. great meter and rhthym. Love the messages you bring out. I just love your poetry verna. Praise God for the gift he has given you hon. It sure is a blessing to many. Hugs.