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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sharp (03/07/13)

TITLE: Life by the sword
By A B
03/12/13


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Piercing, slicing, penetrating
Sharper than a two-edged sword
Every evil, subjugating
Life, or death, to each affords
Lancinating, swiftly rending
Soul from spirit, joint from bone
Thoughts and actions, apprehending
Making every motive, known

Worldliness and approbation
In this wilderness, I find
Selfish pride and exultation
Poison, body, soul and mind
Neither herb, nor soothing plaster
Nor a serpent, lifted high
T'is Thy Word, Oh Lord and Master
That will heal and purify

Venesect, this vile adhesion
Every inner part, lay bare
Extirpate each noxious lesion
Slough of self and sin, repair
Deeper plunge, with skilled precision
Excise all carnality
Undertake heart-circumcision
'Til I die to all, but Thee

Gracious, merciful physician
Graft Thy will, inside of me
Teach me, truth and full submission
I would ever faithful be
Bind up wounds, with lovingkindness
Pour in Gilead's healing balm,
Word of God, become the healer
Instrument, of peace and calm


For the word of God is quick, and powerful, and sharper than any twoedged sword, piercing even to the dividing asunder of soul and spirit, and of the joints and marrow, and is a discerner of the thoughts and intents of the heart
Heb 4:12 KJV

For it was neither herb, nor mollifying plaster that restored them to health: but thy word, O Lord, which healeth all things.
Wisdom of Solomon 16:12 KJV


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CD (Camille) Swanson 03/14/13
Beautifully said.

God bless~
Ellen Carr 03/18/13
This is a really good poem, beautifully written. Your use of language, rhyme and rhythm is great. I had to look up the meaning of a couple of those medical terms. Do you have a medical background? Well done!
Cheryl Harrison 03/18/13
You have talent. This poem is excellent. As commented before, I also wondered if you have a medical background. I liked the way you wove your words together with tidbits from the Old Testament,like "no serpent lifted high" and the "balm of Gilead". This made the poem even more special. Great job! God Bless.
A B03/18/13
Thank you. I was a nurse in a past life. I did wonder if some of the words, disrupted the flow or ease of reading.
lynn gipson 03/18/13
I think this is excellent, I write poetry too, but never anything with such flow and meter as this! Your words are graphic but not without deep thought and meaning. Great job!
Christina Banks 03/18/13
I loved these lines:

Gracious, merciful physician
Graft Thy will, inside of me
Teach me, truth and full submission
I would ever faithful be

Nicely done.
Alicia Renkema03/18/13
This is a real gem, excellent poetry writing. I have had a passion for poetry for close to 45 years now. I don't think I will ever be able to write a poem that has such sophisticated language, combined with beautiful alliteration, that just rolls off the tongue while at the time having such depth! I had to look up a word but it is good for writers to continue to expand their vocabulary. I loved the line about heart-circumcision. I also really loved the last stanza. However, the first stanza is incredibly rich and you bring home the point well that words can tear at a person's heart and it is only the word of the Lord that can truly heal. Thank so much for sharing this with us, and welcome back! Blessings...
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/18/13
This is beautiful. Poetry isn't my strong suit as I am tone deaf and can't always hear the rhythm. The first two stanzas really flowed for me. I'm in awe of the way you make it look so easy. I did stumble a tiny bit more towards the middle-end. I'm not sure if it was because I don't hear some of the words you used on a regular basis, though I do enjoy it when an author shows me new words. I think it is stunning and the way you laid your emotions raw and naked on the screen shows such courage, as well as a grand passion for Christ.
Lillian Rhoades 03/18/13
Your title isn't lost on me:-) Living by the Word often means exactly as you've so beautifully and aptly described it. I love your "surgical" progression from cutting to grafting, binding, and healing.

Your message that's presented with great rhyme and rhythm adds to this great piece of writing, in my opinion.:-)

My take-away: The Word of God does not simply cuts but soothes -"an instrument of peace and calm."

Inspiring and well done!
Judith Gayle Smith03/18/13
This moves me to tears. It is so well written and so very heartfelt. Thank you and God bless you muchly for writing the longing of my heart . . .
Kelli Hunt03/19/13
This could be a hymn - such great use of words and thoughts. Well done!
Margaret Kearley 03/19/13
This is absolutely amazing Deb, a truly wonderful poem and a prayer from the depths of the heart. Your word choices are so good, absolutely spot on - each line fitting exactly to the crux of your message. Your rhyming and scanning are excellent. Above all, you have beautifully penned the prayer of every heart seeking to drasw closer to God. Thank you for this wonderful poem.
Myrna Noyes03/19/13
This moving poem has excellent rhyme and rhythm, but the most wonderful thing about it is the inspiring message! Your first four lines caught my attention right away, and my heart flowed along to the end with your lovely words! (However a couple of them were new to me, too!) I wish I could write poetry like this, but since I can't, I'm glad you (and others) can!! Great job! :)
Danielle King 03/20/13
What an amazingly well crafted, smoothly flowing and uniquely on topic, brilliant poem. You could say I loved it!
Edmond Ng 03/21/13
Nicely written!
lynn gipson 03/21/13
Congratulations on you excellence! I really loved this one. Great job HC.
Margaret Kearley 03/21/13
Many congrats Deb - I was sure this wonderful poem would win an award. I have gone back to it and read it times - as others have said,. I think it should be put to music. Thanks too for your kind comment.
Cheryl Harrison 03/21/13
As I said the first time I read your poem... you have talent, a gift from the Lord. Congratulations on your Highly Commended. Keep writing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/22/13
Congratulations on ranking 5th in level three and 12 overall!
vincent lyons03/23/13
Beautiful poetry. I like poems that glorify God and are faithful to His Word. This was a joy to read.
Vince.
Holly Westefeld03/25/13
Superb word smithery! I just wish it had made it in to the EC list.
Thank you for your kind comments.