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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sharp (03/07/13)

TITLE: John's Journal
By Allen Povenmire
03/12/13


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- Third day after the Passover

All quiet, for now. Peterís sitting by himself again, sharpening that old sword and staring off into space. It seems so unreal. We were just having the Passover meal with Jesus - and now heís dead. Iíve relived the events of the past few days over and over in my head, but I canít change the outcome...Jesus is now dead.

Weíve spent the Sabbath in the shuttered darkness of this room, like cowards, in fear of being found. Mary Magdalene went to the tomb this morning to care for his body, and none of us had the courage to accompany her. He loved us so much and I feel like weíve abandoned him.

Peter acts like heís harboring an inner guilt beyond what the rest of us feel. At least heíd followed Jesus and saw what was going on that night. But he gets angry when we ask him what went on in the high priestís courtyard and refuses to talk to us. He just sits there in the shadows, working that stone back and forth on the blade of that old sword.

The morning of his execution is sort of a blur now. On either side of him were two thieves being executed for their crimes. Jesus had spoken to one of them and, though Iíd strained to hear, his words were absorbed by all the shouting and wailing around us. At one point, he looked down at me standing there with his mother, crippled with the unbearable pain of watching her sonís crucifixion. His eyes locked on mine, and he told me his mother was now my mother. How typical of Jesus, to care for others, even at the height of his own suffering.

Surely I could have done something to stop this. I donít know. But I do know that Iíve never felt so loved as I did that night, eating our meal in that borrowed upper room, listening to Jesus speak as I leaned against him. Earlier, heíd gone around the room and had a special moment with each of us as he washed our feet like a servant would. His love for us was unquestionable.

Later that night, we walked to a nearby garden area. It was a favorite spot, one where Jesus often went to pray. The rest of the men waited at the entrance, while he took Peter, James, and me inside with him. He walked on a little further by himself. Iím so ashamed that we all fell asleep, waiting for him to return.

We awoke to see Judas Iscariot leading a mob up the hillside, carrying clubs and swords. I burned with rage when I realized that Judas was the betrayer Jesus had spoken of earlier that evening. I thought of Peter and that old sword heíd been carrying. Though Iíd scoffed at the notion before, I wished then I had one myself.

But Peter is a fisherman. Heís not much with a sword. One of the high priestís men grabbed Jesus by the arm to take him away. Peter pulled his sword out and started swinging wildly. He awkwardly lunged downward at the manís head. The man moved just enough that the only thing Peter struck was his right ear. Evidently Peter had sufficiently sharpened that old blade, because it severed the ear completely. The man bent over, crying out in shock and pain.

We stood in disbelief at what Peter had done. Even though there was another sword somewhere amongst us, there was no way we could stand up to this gang that Judas had brought to abduct Jesus, and now Peter had struck the first blow. But Jesus quickly defused the situation.

"Shall I not drink the cup which My Father has given me?Ē* Jesus admonished Peter. He told him to put the sword away. Then he knelt down and healed the man's ear. We were all astonished, even though weíd seen Jesus heal many before. The servant felt his ear and slowly moved his hand away. He gave Jesus a dumbfounded look as others stepped up to grab the Master and tie his hands. Fear overcame us and we all ran off into the darkness.

Iím not sure I can tolerate this painful agony much longer. The guilt of betrayal is gnawing unbearably at my gut. Jesus would never have left us this w

Maryís at the door. Somethingís happened. Will write more later.



*John 18:11 (NKJV)


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CD Swanson 03/14/13
Interesting approach and depiction. Good writing, and interesting thoughts with what could have been the internal thinking of John.

God Bless~
Cheryl Harrison 03/18/13
Ooh... I liked this a lot. Clever way to bring out John's view of biblical events. Thanks for writing. God bless.
lynn gipson 03/18/13
Good telling of the perspective that might have been of John. Great writing from beginning to end. Excellent!
Christina Banks 03/18/13
I really like the glimpse into what John might have been thinking that morning of the Resurrection.
A B03/18/13
Unique and thought provoking angle. I really enjoyed this and very timely.
Joseph Veseli03/18/13
This was a cool take on the topic.

The internal musings of the beloved apostle, something I think every Christian would love to hear, was done very well in this story!
Judith Gayle Smith03/18/13
Wow. I feel that John was taking me along on his walk of pain. This is excellent.
Alicia Renkema03/18/13
This is absolutely excellent! What a clever idea, a journal entry by one of the disciples, and John no less, the one who leaned on our Lord's breast at their last meal together. I love that you start it out saying, "the 3rd day after passover" instead of Resurrection Morning, because of course he didn't know yet. The internal dialogue was so descriptive, bringing up all kinds of meaningful images for any Christian reader. Your MC's questions and thoughts especially concerning Peter were very compelling. I loved the way you ended this piece not even finishing the "w" for the word way, as one would do when writing a journal entry and something important interrupted it. Then you left us with Mary and of course we all know "The Rest of the Story." Well done. I just would like to read his next journal entry! I will eat my hat if this doesn't place!!
Ellen Carr 03/19/13
You've done well with this imagined journal from John. I like the way you bring the story alive and highlight the likely emotions involved.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/20/13
I think that this is an excellent retelling of a well known Bible story. You really allowed the reader a peek inside the MC's had. I also really enjoyed the ending --mainly because I know what's coming next and that is the best news of all! You did an outstanding job on this piece.
Edmond Ng 03/21/13
I like the way this piece is written as part of the biblical event. Well expressed and engaging.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/22/13
Congratulations on ranking 7th in level three and 19 overall!