The Official Writing Challenge
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03/02/13
Excellent. You had me at hello and throughout the entire story. Very well written and spot on topic. Thank you for sharing this excellent piece.
03/02/13
Power tale. made me immediately want to read the scripture referenced. Thanks.
03/02/13
A highly enjoyable and excellent read. Judges is a book that holds my attention normally, (as does the entire Bible) - and this piece was cleverly desgined to feature the book with indelible highlights.

Nicely done. God bless~
Wow what an intense story. You had me holding my breath as I read it. I love how you are bringing to the reader's attention to the Bible. Often when I think of the book of Judges, i find it to be a bit of a tedious read, but you made it come alive for me and made me realize I've been missing some very important stories.
This was delightful to read. I had considered writing on the same scripture, but I could never get my thoughts organized enough to do it. I like the way you wrote it. Well done.
You made this Scripture so real. I was crouching in fear and prayer with these youngsters.

Because He lives and loves . . .
Thank you for making these scriptures come so alive through your intense dialogue between the cousins. I am familiar with this story but it had been a while. I was so hoping that the one cousin would make it to safety. This was a very well crafted and enjoyable story to read, although the ending was sad. Nicely done!
03/03/13
You have brought out the drama and tension of this passage, where Jephthah could literally take no prisoners. I was drawn towards this passage, but let it pass. I'm glad to see how you have treated it.
Wow - tensely written, bringing scripture to life and to fit it so well into the topic is simply amazing. Great job - I hope this does well in the placement, but even if it doesn't you've a great talent for story telling - especially in this genre.
I knew I wouldn't be the only one to write on this topic. You came at it from a different angle, though. Great job with dialogue and characterization. I was drawn to the characters. Good job explaining the Biblical details as well. Hope it finds a well deserved placement!
03/04/13
Insightful, well-paced. Putting names and personalities to biblical stories adds extra life. Do I sense betrayal among the cousins?
03/05/13
You did a great job bringing this OT account to living color. I totally enjoyed the way you wove the tale.
03/05/13
What an interesting, very "on topic" story! I was intrigued by the biblical event it was based upon, too! You did a great job of telling this in a way that made me feel sorry for the "enemy"!
03/05/13
Oh, I also wanted to say that your descriptive and suspenseful beginning totally captured my attention! :)
CONGRATULATIONS ON RANKING 7TH IN YOUR LEVEL AND 16TH OVERALL!!
Nicely Done! I was so glad to see your name in the highest rankings when I got on the boards later on for my final look.You always have such a great style, and your stories are so gripping. You are a joy to read! Have a blessed evening and weekend.
03/08/13
You have done a great job at this story based on the Bible facts. I must admit I didn't know about the 'Shibboleth' vs
'Sibboleth' way they could tell what tribe the person came from. What a great idea it was, to use this as the basis for your story. I really enjoyed the tale. Well done!