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Topic: Bridge (07/31/08)
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TITLE: she stands on a bridge | Previous Challenge Entry
By Tiffanie Chezum
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and fears she can hardly contain
she’s writing a note for her final goodbyes
but words can’t express all her pain
her mem’ries of laughter from times long ago
seem desp’rately far left behind
she tries to recapture her happiness though
despair is now all she can find
the depth of her sorrow wells up in her eyes
and tears start to pour down like rain
she dwells in remorse as her hope slowly dies
and thinks she is going insane
she stands on a bridge and she’s trembling with fear
in fog that’s enshrouded her soul
she grasps for the images once held so dear
a life that the enemy stole
the nemesis taunts her with torturous lies
and bids her to step toward the rail
she anxiously gazes away to the skies
afraid that her foe may prevail
she stands on a bridge as she clenches her fists
her spirit exploding with rage
she ponders the reason such mis’ry exists
and why she is trapped in this cage
she cries out for answers amidst her despair
with diffidence clouding her mind
she wonders why nobody bothers to care
she’s certain that God must be blind
but something from long ago touches her heart
a feeling of love as a child
a promise once made that He’d never depart
a time in her life when she smiled
she stands on a bridge and there’s nowhere to hide
she may walk away in His grace
or maybe she’ll give up and step off the side
what choice will she come to embrace
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And this is DEFINITELY my favorite stanza:
the nemesis taunts her with torturous lies
and bids her to step toward the rail
she anxiously gazes away to the skies
afraid that her foe may prevail
This has great meter and rhyme. Very well done.
This was my favorite line.. "she stands on a bridge and there’s nowhere to hide"... comforting if you are His, frightening if you aren't.
I liked your ending, because it was left wide open. Sadly, not all of these situations turn out with happy endings, but you made the point that a person going through this type of ordeal has to make a choice.
Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed it.
This is really good and I love the rythym and message of it. Keep up the great work.