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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the HUMOR genre (04/12/07)

TITLE: Dear Dad
By Sara Harricharan
04/16/07


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Dear Dad,

Happy birthday! It’s me. Your favorite (and only!) daughter. I was thinking about you last night and trying to write a matching poem for your card. You'd better like it, it took forever to rhyme.

I kept remembering all these crazy memories instead, so as a birthday present, I’m going to list them for you. Ready?

First, remember the day we were fixing the front porch? I was holding the light for you and talking about everything I did that week, including my newest story. You weren’t really paying attention and just for a laugh I said. “So I can keep on talking and you’ll never hear a word I say, right?” And you said. “Right. Hand me that screwdriver.”

Second-That one time I went with you to work and you forgot your cell phone, I told you to “Call home and tell mom to bring it.” We laughed halfway to work.

Happy memories, huh? I finally upgraded my driver’s license. The picture came out good and they finally took off that little red bar that says “under 21”. I never would’ve gotten it without you. Thanks for taking the time to teach me to drive.

I remember my first time driving. I was so scared. You weren’t helping much either when you kept pointing out everything on the road. For example, the dead can and leaf.

And the first time I went to get you coffee? I was terrified I’d plow right into the side of McDonald’s. I was in such a hurry to get going, I forgot to say hi to the girl who took my change and couldn’t hold all the creamer in one hand, so I dumped it on the passenger seat. This, in case you’re wondering, is the reason you stepped on one the next day. Afterwards, I had to park in a corner to get my nerves under control. I was shaking so bad-it was ridiculous. All for a cup of coffee.

Remember the first time you taught me to make instant? You told me to use your favorite cup, heat it for a minute and a half. Get the coffee and add a half teaspoon and stir. Check the color. Add another half teaspoon and stir again. It should be black and then add the creamer.

I did exactly what you told me, except for the coffee didn’t get very black, so I had to keep adding more. I guess I got it backwards though, because I only put in two spoonfuls of creamer and that made it turn a nice brown. No wonder you said it was three cups in one.

Oh, and that quiz. The one that said you were a lion for leadership and managing skills. I really thought I would be just like you and instead I turned out to be a beaver. Which meant I was a perfectionist and liked things to follow in a logical order.

I guess that’s kind of like when people tell me I look like you. Sometimes I think it’s a compliment. And then I remember it’s because we work so well together.

Anyway, this letter is turning into my latest novel. I’ll end it here and wish I was there to help eat your cake (and the frosting!).

Love,

Your dearest, darling daughter,

Sherina


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Jan Ackerson 04/19/07
You managed to be both tender and sweet, and gently humorous--no easy feat! What a lovely, lovely piece.
Julie Arduini04/19/07
What a lovely tribute and yes, such a nice balance of humor. The driving lesson about the dead leaf and from your favorite and only daughter were especially funny. Any dad would love this over any old tie!
TJ Nickel04/20/07
Nice and touchy with great work of quick and inserted punchlines. Part of me wanted you to keep the First, Second, going on in an actual list, putting those nice quips in the end of each one because the pace to it went from quick and funny to longer bits and so kind with harder to find punchlines. I really liked this though, the sentiment, the use of humor in relationship. Thanks for the read, I think you got the genre down perfectly.
Joanne Sher 04/21/07
This is sweet, with just the right touch of humor. I love the "writing a letter" approach. I would have loved to hear more detail about some of the incidents - maybe just flesh them out a bit. I enjoyed this.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/21/07
I like the sense of family and of love that came across in your humorous anecdotes. Good work.
Rita Garcia04/23/07
Humorous, sweet and heartwarming...all with only "750" words!
Val Clark04/24/07
Memories! The letter format works well as a construct for telling several anecdotes. yeggy
Jacquelyn Horne04/24/07
Wonderful, humorous, memory piece! Good job.
Marty Wellington 04/25/07
Oh this was wonderful. Brought back memories of my dad . . . how I miss him. We were close when I was growing up and now he's been gone 15 years--hard to believe. You did a wonderful job of describing a dear relationship with humor and grace. Well done!
Shari Armstrong 04/25/07
A nice walk-or drive-down memory lane of a father-daughter relationship. :) good work.
Myrna Noyes04/25/07
Sweet and nostalgic--with a nice touch of humor! Good job!
Cheri Hardaway 04/25/07
What a blessing we have when we have good memories of our folks. Thanks for the reminder! Cheri
Betty Castleberry04/25/07
I will echo what somebody said about missing their dad. I miss mine terribly, too, and this piece brought back memories. Loved the coffee anecdote. Three cups in one. :0) Very nicely done.
T. F. Chezum04/25/07
Humorous flashbacks on family ... I really like it.
william price04/26/07
Nothing like reading a story that makes your heart smile and feel warm at the same time. Excellent combo and great work. God bless.