The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/09
This is all excellent, but I found myself holding my breath in the last third--what a superb lesson! I sat on a grand jury for 18 months, and a regular jury once, and that application never occurred to me. Very good!
01/16/09
Excellent application. You built up to it very nicely.
I love your final question and the conviction it stirs in the reader.
01/20/09
This was excellent... great writing. I could identify easily, and feel the anxiety in my heart with the MC
Love the suspense of this piece. Having worked in the judicial system, it was great to see your mc trying to think of how to answer in order to stay. I felt the question at the end was a wonderful ending to a really great story.
I like that the ending is left open, allowing the reader to draw his own conclusion.

I enjoyed this well-written piece.
01/20/09
Creative entry choice for USA! :) Well done.
Good ending!

I personally would cut the sentence
"Right or wrong, ....."

01/20/09
What a great story...loved the ending. Well done.
Simply brilliant.
01/21/09
Great choice for a topic for USA. Really liked the application and open-ended question at the end.
01/21/09
I was engaged throughout. Great choice for the topic, and masterfully done.