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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Hmph! (03/04/10)

TITLE: The Truth of a Lie
By Marita Vandertogt
03/08/10


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Thoughts, tiny armies of words, band together and stomp across my brain. They’re random. They have no plan. They attack each other. They make me tired, too tired to give them much attention for any length of time. The chair under my butt is getting harder. My posterior cheeks give way to painful stabs in the small of my back.

How long have I been sitting here. How long has it been since the the brilliant red flashing light stopped strobing its’ way through my head.
Dial 911, he’d said. Now. The word echoes back and forth along with the lights. He’d grabbed his chest. I felt helpless, the noise of the siren taking over.

“Would you like something to drink while you wait,” a woman stands in front of me. “I can get you a coffee or something. There’s a machine right over there.” She keeps talking and I can’t seem to say anything back at her. I nod my head yes.

I need to know how he is. I need to get the thoughts out of my head. To see if they’re real. Did I make them up. I hear my voice, again and again, “Where have you been? Where have you been?” The question keeps repeating itself. His briefcase lay on the kitchen floor, his supper cold in the refrigerator. He didn’t answer. Just grabbed his chest, his knuckles and face an equal white. I feel the guilt.

“Excuse me Mrs.?”

“Andrews,” I say, the coffee cup in my hand, cold now.

“Yes, well.” He begins to say. “You’re husband is resting now. He’ll be fine. We’ll run more tests in the morning, but you go home and get some rest now.” The white of his coat shrinks down the hallway. I want to follow him. I have more questions for Paul. I need answers now.

I go home to keep on waiting. The kitchen light is still on. I open the refrigerator. His dinner is still there, untouched. I pull out the plate and let it drop to the floor. Bright green peas roll under the counter. Smashed pieces lay at at my feet where they belong. It was his dinner. The one that was waiting for him, along with me, getting colder while my temperature rose.

I wake up and it’s the next day. It feels different from yesterday and for a moment I can’t remember why. His hospital room is bright with too much artificial sun. The bed is long and white and cold. He doesn’t look at me. He’s not happy to see me, and I feel like I should know why. I think I know, but I’m still not sure.

“You can go home today,” I tell him.

“Ya. They told me. Just some meds and I’m on my way.” He laughs in his throat, with himself. Not me. Then he says words that I can’t make sense of, but I know somehow they were words to a question I hadn’t asked yet.
“Anna.” He starts out. “I’m going home with you, but I’m not staying. I was going to tell you last night.”

“Your clothes are over here.” I interrupt him, pull the shirt off the hanger and toss it over to him. “Remember when I bought you that one, three summers ago for our 10th anniversary party?” Words keep coming out of my mouth, but I don’t seem to be generating them. They’re coming from someone else.

The food and china pieces of the plate are still on the kitchen floor. It seemed pointless to clean them up. I hear the car door out front and the click of her heels on the walkway up to the front door.

“I’ll call you,” he says on his way out the door. “We’ll make arrangements.”

Two simple sentences and he’s gone. A deep guttural hmph, comes from my throat. I feel the pain of it stuck there, wanting to come out in a scream. But it doesn’t. I sit on the chair and wait. For what, I don’t know. Maybe for the sun to start shining through the kitchen window. Maybe for the pain to start up again in my butt cheeks and move into my back, away from the centre of my heart. Maybe for the plate to clean itself up, put itself back on the dinner table, warm and waiting. As though nothing had ever happened.


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Member Comments
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Rikki Akeo03/11/10
I hear you.
Jackie Wilson03/12/10
What a view into this woman's pain! Good treatment of a difficult, emotional situation.
Barbara Lynn Culler03/14/10
I wondered what was up when she went home instead of being at his side!

I could feel the emotion of it all being surreal in the way you told the story.

Good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/15/10
A very interesting twist on an intense topic. My heart goes out to the wife,
Gregory Kane03/15/10
Ouch
Donna Wolther03/15/10
You did a great job of depicting that feeling of numbness that accompanies this kind of pain.
Marita Thelander 03/15/10
Heart wrenching. I could feel the numbness envelop her as he walked out the door. So sad how often this happens.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/16/10
What an emotional view of the end of a marriage you present. I was impressed by the symbolism of the coldness and brokenness of the plate. Well done.
Sarah Elisabeth 03/17/10
Hmmm, wow. Pain from so many angles. I could feel the depth of sadness throughout this entire piece. Good job
Lyn Churchyard03/17/10
Well written. It shows only too well the emotions of a marriage ending. I like the way you portrayed your MC-almost dispassionate in a way. It is sometimes easier to cope that way. Excellent job Wonder-r.
Beth LaBuff 03/17/10
Wow! Heartbreaking, gripping, so well-written. I know this is reality… but I still wanted a happy ending.
Ruth Stromquist03/17/10
I'm amazed at how much you portrayed of emotions, scenes, and crises in 750 words, yet made it all weave together perfectly. Most excellent!
Mona Purvis03/18/10
Strong emotions, powerful, deep and painful. Hard to write to show the anguish, but you really pulled it off.
True drama.

Mona