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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Twilight Years of Life (07/02/09)

TITLE: Sophia's Movie
By Verna Cole Mitchell
07/06/09


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Her birthday dinner over now,
Sophia sat to rest.
With family surrounding her,
She thought how she’d been blessed.

She closed her eyes to take a nap
And saw a movie screen.
The drama that unfolded then
By no one else was seen.

There was a simple sequence to
The pictures passing there,
A cinema of long ago
With memories most rare.

Amid a crowd of little girls
At roller-skating fun,
She was the laughing pig-tailed child,
Who was the fastest one.

A blue Schwinn bike rolled into view
With her upon the seat.
What explorations she’d gone on
While riding down the street!

She saw herself, quite still for once,
An open book in hand,
Romancing and adventuring
With dashing pirate band.

From dueling with curtain rods
To snowballs from a fort,
Her old eyes saw her younger self
A heroine of sport.

She laughed at her own giggles when
A mouse climbed Papa’s pants,
And Papa, taken by surprise,
Performed a lively dance.

Her face stood out in groups of kids,
For races, ever ready.
While sliding down the steepest hills,
She held her old sled steady.

Then faster, faster, scenes flashed by
Of girlhood’s happy times,
With kick the can and climbing trees
And swinging on grape vines.

The images of youthful days
Brought joy remembering.
She couldn’t think of one of them
She’d trade for anything



“Poor Grandma,” whispered teen grandkids
Above her gentle snoring.
“With no computer or TV,
Her childhood was so boring.”


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Mariane Holbrook07/09/09
What an absolutely delightful entry! I found your meter so perfect that I tapped my foot while I read it. It captures the essence of the twilight years when memories become so precious that no one understands except those who lived in that era. The teenagers who pitied her had no idea how much enjoyment she'd had in her early life. This was a great entry and one in which you can justifiably take great pride!
Loren T. Lowery07/10/09
Except for the pig-tails, (naturally curly hair, for one thing)this was a walk down memory lane for me. What a delightful way to present the twilight years - and yes, I too am sometimes befuddled that kids of today could consider our lives back them to be boring.
Lynda Schultz 07/10/09
This is wonderful. The kids' comments reminds me of the people who think heaven's going to be boring too—imagine sitting around on clouds all day! Poor misguided souls (lol).
Patricia Turner07/10/09
What lovely rhyming and what a wonderful way to compare the differences in generations, even though its so sad that kids now don't have the pleasures of old.
Patricia Herchenroether07/10/09
Perfect meter, flowed like a song. A lovely picture of childhood.
Gregory Kane07/11/09
What a lot of fun. Clever clever writing.
I found the sudden transition right at the end a little jarring. I wonder if adding a second verse from the grandchildren's perspective might have eased this. But nevertheless a creative and entertaining piece
Allan Morelos07/11/09
Wow! I love the last stanza the most as it shows the different kinds of perspectives on fun and enjoyment these two generations hold.

Thanks for this poem.
Charla Diehl 07/11/09
I loved this walk down memory lane and the way your poem moves so fluently. Well chosen picture words and perfect rhyme and meter make this a winner in my book. Love the contrast at the end--poor grandkids don't know the fun they've missed!
Robyn Burke07/12/09
Great rhythm, great message. favorite verse is the mouse on Papa's pants and his dance. Loved the last verse.
Beth LaBuff 07/12/09
I enjoyed all the memories in Sophia's Movie (great title for this). :) Your last stanza made me smile, I did not expect that, BUT IT'S PERFECT!! Love this!
Sonya Leigh07/13/09
This poem was so much fun! You have such a clever way with words...very nicely done.
Shelley Ledfors 07/13/09
I love this! It is so well done...and the ending was perfect.
Christina Banks 07/15/09
I love the teen's reaction at the end...so typical! Great entry!!
Diana Dart 07/15/09
Super sweet - I could picture the scenes myself, and was eagerly awaiting the next memory. The ending was great, what a tweak to the reader's nose!
Colin Swann07/15/09
Wow, what a blessing to be favoured to read such a masterpiece of rhyme.
Thank you so much - Colin
Sara Harricharan 07/15/09
LOL! A boring childhood? I think not! Loved riding through these memories with Sophia. Simply delightful!
Karlene Jacobsen 07/15/09
The bit about the mouse and Dad's lively dance was a chuckler. LOL. This was delightful to read.
Bryan Ridenour07/15/09
Loved the poem and the walk down memory lane. Very Well Done!!!
Chely Roach07/15/09
This was warm, beautiful, and charming. And the last stanza gave me a chuckle! Loved it!