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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Canada (01/29/09)

TITLE: The Cumulus Brothers' Great Adventure
By Verna Cole Mitchell
02/01/09


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Two brother clouds went sailing
Across Canadian skies,
With dreams of seeing glaciers
Through their own puffy eyes.

They floated past cloud cities,
Where old clouds slowly crept,
Past young clouds coyly flirting,
While baby clouds still slept.

And looking down upon the earth
Through heavy driving rain,
They saw a long train winding
Through tortuous terrain.

They loitered in the morning
To watch a thrilling race,
When sunshine chased white water
Down craggy canyon’s face.

They noticed flocks of big horned sheep,
Great elk, and shaggy bear,
Some horses round a water hole,
And ground squirrels everywhere

They witnessed sides of mountains,
Where trees refused to cling,
With firs abiding at their peaks,
And snow o’er everything.

Then mammoth glaciers awed them,
And ice fields long extending
Reflected their own fleecy selves
In crystal never ending.

The lakes they saw from melting snow
Were clearest emerald green,
With rocky shores surrounding
A most breathtaking scene.

Of all God’s beauty they had seen,
They liked the glaciers best,
And perched on one gray mountain top,
They paused to take a rest.


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Lynda Schultz 02/05/09
I could see the Rockies—very nice!
Mona Purvis02/06/09
Very well written. I love it when a writer paints a picture while sparingly using words. The cloud "family" idea is sweet.
Mona
Joanne Sher 02/06/09
Just beautiful and delightful. Wonderful rhythm to this, and lovely descriptions. Enjoyed this very much.
Karlene Jacobsen 02/08/09
I loved the imagery.
Linda Payne02/09/09
I liked how you used the perspective of the clouds to tell the beauty of the land. Creative and clever.
Jan Ackerson 02/09/09
How clever! I wish I knew how to write poetry like this, with delightful word pictures and telling a charming story. I loved this.
Leah Nichols 02/09/09
Makes me want to take a road trip!
Well done....I enjoyed this poem very much. :)
Sharlyn Guthrie02/09/09
Aww...what a fun perspective! I enjoyed the cloud's eye view. :)
Connie Dixon02/10/09
This is great! What an awesome picture for us visual learners. Good job!
Gerald Shuler 02/11/09
I love good poetry so of course I love this one. The simple story supplies the structure for beautiful Canadian sight-seeing. Well done.
Diana Dart 02/11/09
This was awesome - you may be tempting me to truly love poetry!
Sara Harricharan 02/11/09
Awww! This just registed on the adorable scale! lol. I enjoyed it. My favorite line in particular was where the baby clouds slept. What a neat image. Loved this! ^_^
Angela M. Baker-Bridge02/11/09
What a creatively clever approach! Excellent.