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08/15/08
Hehe - cute. Great rhymes, and a fun story.
08/16/08
Cute! And mom playing the part of "hound of heaven" and pursuing you into the bathroom was priceless.
08/16/08
That left me with goosebumps again, and a big lump in my throat. You see, I also followed my big sisters to the altar, at the age of 8. One night my sisters went to a meeting and came home and said they had been saved. The next night, accompanied by Evelyn, my second oldest sister, I ran to the altar and cried my eyes out. I knew, even at age 8 that I was a sinner...Parents' salvation does not save you...Thanks so much, M, for sharing this wonderful poem...Helen
08/16/08
Funny story. Your MC is a real character.
Fun read ... good rhyme and meter. Great job.
If this isn't true, (I believe it is), you sure know how to get into the head of a child. Excellent writing.
I'm guessing this delightful little girl grew up to be a delightful "Christian" woman, full of fun AND the joy of the Lord. As usual, you're delivered a wonderful, humorous narrative in just-right verse. I always enjoy your stories so much.
LOL! This is lots of fun. Great rhyme and meter, too. Kudos.
Haha! I liked this, it's a great funny story. Well done.
08/18/08
Funny story/poem here. I really enjoyed the youthful mischief you've captured. Thanks for sharing this "almost" true story.
08/19/08
My husband is a big chocolate bar fan, and I steal his all the time! I enjoyed the humor of this piece, but somehow found myself melting for the bad sister crying at the altar.
Several have asked me about my sister, Norma. She was so dramatically converted to Christ that night that people all over town talked about the change in her life. After graduating from high school and Bible College, she served with her husband in West Africa for over 35 years as an outstanding missionary and soul-winner, with two of her three children returning to Africa themselves as missionaries after Bible College and Seminary. As Paul Harvey would say, "And now you have the rest of the story." :-)
This is excellent. Such a good and catchy poem with great message. Good job.