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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Abundance (06/08/06)

TITLE: Queen of Candy
By Joe Moreland
06/14/06


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Brynna was extremely content with her official title and it’s attendant responsibilities: Queen of Candy. As the Queen of Candy, it was her task to gather and sample all known sweets in the universe. She had accumulated storehouses of chocolates, taffy, lozenges, mints, gummy chews in the shapes of all sorts of animals, suckers, jawbreakers, gum, licorice, sprinkles and even flavored sugar served on hard sugar sticks. Hmmm, delicious!. Brynna also claimed many non-candy treats as part of her domain, such as cake, cookies, ice cream and donuts. Candy was, literally, her life – and life was good.

Except today.

Today tragedy had befallen the six-year-old queen. A sinister villain - known as the Evil Tooth Fairy – had stolen the secret to her special powers; her Sweet Tooth. Without her Sweet Tooth, Brynna would no longer be able to magically divine the good candy from the not-as-good candy (there was no such thing as bad candy, of course). Without that power, she could be forced to abdicate her throne in favor of a new queen – one who still had her Sweet Tooth. The very thought sent shivers down Brynna’s spine.

There was only one thing to do. She would have to call in a specialist. Someone skilled in the art of discretely retrieving items claimed by the Evil Tooth Fairy: Sir Dentist, Knight of the Sugar Table would work nicely. If anyone could find her Sweet Tooth, it was Sir Dentist. With a wave of her hand Brynna sent one of her assistants flying off to find and bring the gallant knight to her. Scurrying frantically, the assistant scattered packages of candy everywhere. Little round pieces of candy coated chocolate rolled all across the throne room, and she nearly cried at the waste of all that delicious candy.

In a short time Sir Dentist appeared before her.

“How may I be of assistance, my Queen?” He asked, bowing low.

“Oh, Sir Dentist, I have lost my Sweet Tooth and have no way of telling which candy is the best anymore! Can you get it back for me?”

The brave knight chuckled good-naturedly. “My dear Queen of Candy, that is no problem at all. For you see, the magic is not in the Sweet Tooth, but in the candy itself. If you simply eat enough candy, you will develop a brand new Sweet Tooth in no time at all.”

The queen squealed in childish delight. “Yea! Sir Dentist you have saved me from a fate worse than homework. How can I ever repay your kindness?”

The wise knight’s visage took on a serious countenance as he answered his child-queen in a low voice. “Only this, my queen; brush your teeth each and every time you eat candy so that there will always remain in your head a Sweet Tooth, no matter how many you lose to the Evil Tooth Fairy.”

“It will be as you say, Sir Knight,” Brynna answered in mock seriousness. “As time allows, of course.”

*******

Joe looked over at his daughter as she gazed out fogged up windows onto rain splattered streets and sidewalks on their way to the dentist’s office. The look of utter serenity and beautiful contentment upon her face caught him off guard. Her eyes were half-slits, the corners of her mouth turned up, ever so slightly, her cheeks were flush and her chin lifted her lovely face at a gentle upwards angle. For all appearances, she looked as though she was basking in the warmth of a mild summer’s day.

What in the world, he wondered, could possibly plant such a perfectly blissfull expression on the face of a six year old child? Shaking his head, he wondered to himself if they didn’t own all of the secrets to happiness in the world.


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Sharlyn Guthrie06/15/06
What a "sweet" story! You have certainly captured the essence of a child's imagination!
Amy Michelle Wiley 06/15/06
I've been called a Candy Queen myself, so this caught my eye and what a charming read!
Sherry Wendling06/17/06
Very clever, cute, and super enjoyable...But all the more so because your writing is really tight and skillful here! Luscious descriptions (I could shoot you for sending me to the freezer for ice cream!), good, active verbs, tight construction. Beginning and ending strong. This one rates high in my book!
Lynda Schultz 06/19/06
This is marvelous. What a clever way to address the theme. A delightful story. Great job.
Helen Paynter06/20/06
Beautiful, light, humorous piece. I love the two voices you used and the way you constructed it. Good job.
Phyllis Inniss 06/21/06
An endearing story and delightful to read. It would go down well in a children's book of stories.