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Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)
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TITLE: True Beauty Revealed | Previous Challenge Entry
By LaNaye Perkins
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Thick mane and tail, stunningly pure
Her build was perfect, her lines demure
With her spirit and pride she allured
The buyer smitten, wholly drawn in
The mare stunning, the auction she‘d win
Blinded to signs drugs hid deep within
And her scars concealed by evil men
Not till the medicines eased their hold
Did her damaged nature show so bold
For years of abuse left scars untold
Her mind damaged by humans so cold
Compelled by love the new owner prayed
Seeking God’s wisdom every day
To help this mare in every way
Her heart determined never to sway
As kind years passed the mare understood
This human was kind, yes she was good
Her mind forgot the evil untold
Her heart a place where love again flowed
Such is the tale, a mare once abused
Who God did place, for a life renewed
With broken mind, though flawless appeared
Her life now blessed, true beauty revealed
*The poem above is a true account of a mare who was terribly abused the first seventeen years of her life. She was shown successfully in Western Pleasure and Carriage, until arthritis made her useless. She was used by humans because of her beauty, until she had nothing left to give. Then they discarded her and sold her at an auction.
Because she was so poorly handled she was left an emotional wreck and quite dangerous to humans. It took years of loving kindness, and a lot of patience, before the years of abuse started melting away.
A loving spirit and willing attitude have begun to emerge from the mare these days. How sad that it got buried so many years ago by callous humans who wanted only to advance their reputations in the show ring: Humans who gave little, if any, regard to the mare’s needs.
She has a home where she will always be loved and given gentle care now. And the true beauty she was born with has finally been revealed.
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RED INK: Every reader has a different opinion when it comes to good poetry, so take this only as one person's opinion.
I felt like some of the lines were forced just to make the rhyme work. Some slight revision could make them all flow smoothly. If you would like, I could PM some examples and suggestions.
Like I said, though, just one person's opinion.
The poem was wonderful anyway.
Laury