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Topic: Writing (01/11/07)
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TITLE: Lifesaver! | Previous Challenge Entry
By Joanney Uthe
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From the pain of your childhood strife.
Suicide you may have committed,
If to this writing form you had not submitted.
I did not always understand my friend’s poems,
Her vocabulary oft as unfamiliar as Jeroboam’s.
Yet, I understood what her therapist meant,
Writing is therapy when you use it to lament.
Too many siblings for comprehension,
Didn’t leave time for personal attention.
Only one thing I could do right,
If I wrote a poem, they’d think I’m bright.
Sharing negative feelings didn’t fair well,
So on paper, my pains I learned to tell.
But if someone discovered my journal,
My life at home became infernal.
So my poem topics turned to worse
As I learned to journal in verse.
Though my message may be tragic,
They would like it, ‘cuz poetry was magic.
I made it through hard times,
By writing simple rhymes.
Mourning when my grandpa died,
A poem of memories while I cried.
I got through life with an alcoholic,
By writing poems that were symbolic,
Or straight-forward and to the point.
Whatever way my pain I could disjoint.
Eventually my poems gave way,
To a Friend who was here to stay.
By my side through think and thin,
He died on the cross because of my sin.
My pains I no longer need to hide,
Their sword also pierced His side.
My writing took a long vacation
While I learned about salvation.
Now I feel called to create,
And this call cannot wait.
Whether it a poem or story,
I need to write it for His glory.
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You have the heart of a poet, for sure. I agree with Julie. You have a genuine gift for making remarkable rhymes!
I really appreciate the message that comes through your words, too, very "On Target!" for the challenge topic. While I see the discipline of writing poetry good for the writer of prose, too (finding the one best verb, rather than relying on lots of adjectives), you have given me more to think about: how to describe painful things via the obscurity in poems.
As for rhythm and meter: My "secret" is to count syllables and apply accent marks, so I can compare stanza and verse to tell if one of my poems sails smoothly across the floor, whether in a waltz meter, or a polka trot!
Thank you, too, dear Friend, for your generous comments on my writing.