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Stories from a random mind
by Betty Castleberry
09/23/07
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Sunday Morning

I flip through the hymnal. Doodle on a visitor’s card. The preacher drones on. Blah, blah, blah. He’s saying something about being charitable and loving and The Golden Rule. Yawn. I finally look up. Is that a fish tie he’s wearing? Now he’s got my attention.
(46 words)


An outside Delight

A tiny winged creature drinks nectar from my hummingbird feeder. A closer look reveals it’s not a hummingbird, but a butterfly. It folds and unfolds its graceful orange wings in slow motion while it feeds. The bully hummingbird that rules the feeder leaves it alone, watching along with me. (49 words)


Wings

My heart is filled with longing. Praise music lifts me up, but I cannot reach the place I want to go. My open Bible beckons me. His word will fills in the blanks and sends me soaring. Thank you Jesus for my wings. (43 words)


The Temptation

It’s just one little cookie. It’s the last one, and I hate to be wasteful. My diet won‘t suffer if I eat it. I’ll have my burger tonight without the bun. I pop the chocolate mound into my mouth all at once. It’s definitely worth skipping the bun. (48 words)


A Tender Reminiscing

Old photographs litter the bed. My sisters smile at me from the glossy pictures, and my tears fall freely. Kinky home permanents have become sleek styles streaked with gray. Missing teeth grins and knobby knees have become wrinkled smiles and well padded knees. I’m happy-sad. (45 words)




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Emily Blakely 26 Sep 2007
Favorites for me are 2 and 5, most definitely 5's 'happy-sad' capturing.
Tammy Johnson 26 Sep 2007
The sap in me loves the last one! Great choice of words in all of them to give vivid images and feeling.
Linda Roth 26 Sep 2007
Betty, you did a good job at capturing life in every one of these. I think I like the last one best.
darlene hight 26 Sep 2007
I loved all of these wonderfully entertaining. Darlene
Janice Cartwright  25 Sep 2007
Betty, such a wonderful menagerie of vignettes! Very entetaining and as another reader commented, also convicting.
Allison Egley  25 Sep 2007
I liked how these were all so different from each other. I liked number 3 best, I think. Cookies. Yum.
Seema Bagai  24 Sep 2007
Loved all of the stories, but the chocolate one is the best.
dub W 24 Sep 2007
#1 & #3 hit the nail on the head. I was afraid you were writing about me. Great job.
Laurie Walker 24 Sep 2007
Sunday Morning made me laugh out loud on a Monday morning. Well done!
Mo 24 Sep 2007
All are wonderful. The 1st is intriguing. The 4th made me smile. & I love the 5th.
Verna Cole Mitchell  23 Sep 2007
I loved all of these--so identified with the "diet," but I loved best the sisters grown up--happy/sad. Great job.
Jan Ackerson  23 Sep 2007
My favorites are the bully hummingbird and the "happy/sad." These are beautifully written--thanks for playing!
Kristen Hester  23 Sep 2007
Wonderful,wonderful. I liked the one about the hummingbird also. I love to watch them at my house fight for the food. You said a lot with few words.
Pat Guy  23 Sep 2007
Ooooo ....! The last two got me and the church one 'ouched' me! ;) These were soooo good Betty!
Joanne Sher  23 Sep 2007
These are ALL great, Betty - but I was LOVING "Wings." Amazing stuff!
Linda Germain  23 Sep 2007
I can't believe you even considered NOT doing this. These are amazing! That happy-sad one is so on target. Loved them all. ~
Rachel Burkum 23 Sep 2007
You made me chuckle, convicted me and entertained me all at once. Glad you joined in!
Douglas Sowers 23 Sep 2007
Sunday morning wonderfully captured my every Sunday morning. Fish Tie? Wonderfully tacky detail.




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