The Official Writing Challenge
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You make some great points. I can really relate to this. I noticed your voice and tense shifted a bit, especially in the end. You started with I, then in end it was we and then you switched to you. I think it would have been powerful if you stayed in the first person single voice. You did a good job of writing on topic. You have a wonderful message and you give the reader some good things to think about.

If you'd like more feedback on your entry, go to FW group on Facebook and look for the post, Drop a Hint, or the forums and leave a hint about your title.
06/19/25
Congratulations Art on your winning entry.

I took some time to think of the implications of the thorn with my name too.

You wrote he was clothed in dirt and blood...that was such a vivid word picture among many that you wrote.