The Official Writing Challenge
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You've written a great story. Looking in through the word window you’ve given us, I detect love, diversity - denoting equality of status, and His Word.
For me, being a bit of an introvert, it was very busy in there. I felt a need to slow things. Perhaps for such a limited word allowance, more of a summary of movement would have made me more at home.
Then again, maybe extroverts got right amongst the crowd and had a lovely night.
Kudos.
08/29/23
I have to agree with the other comment. The story is busy with a lot of movement, description, etc. Much of the information was unnecessary, or could be trimmed down. That way, you could work on the true message of the challenge - perhaps having the characters entering into spirited debate over the topic.