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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: JOURNEY (01/13/22)
It was a very cold day for walking. Mid-winter, nearing the shortest day of the year, and the light was fading fast.

I was tempted to turn back but encouraged myself on towards the water. No one was about, the air was so still and it was icy cold as I made my way along the footpath across the fields. Hands in pockets, hat pulled down I carried on, determined to at least catch a glimpse of the sea. As I reached the bank leading up to the water I stood looking over the inlet, the tide was up and as always it was a beautiful sight. I rested for a few minutes, soaking up the peace and stillness, aware that My Father was with me, and enjoying my company. I smiled as I soaked up the atmosphere. However, I didn’t dwell long because it was bitterly cold, and I could feel the iciness invading me through my thick clothing.

On turning around I was now on my return journey heading back towards warmth, light and a hot cup of tea. I started to walk faster, I wanted to get home before dark.
 
It was then that I felt the familiar nudge that I had come to recognise as my Heavenly Father.
I felt Him tell me that my whole life I had been heading home. Every day, every hour, every second, every moment in time I had been walking a journey towards my Eternal home every step bringing me nearer to Heaven.

He was beckoning me to look forward to a time when there would be no more struggling or pain. My temporary walk through this life would one day usher me into life in Eternity with Him, finally whole, and perfectly fulfilled in Him.

As I continued my journey home, I pondered on these insights, until finally I was welcomed by a warm home and hot drink, glowing from the invigorating walk.

Over the following days, I continued to dwell on what my Father had shared with me.
I was so thankful for the encouragement.

Even though I love this world He has created, and I am aware of the life He lives in me, I always carry the Hope of what is to come, at the end of my life’s journey.

I’ll see you there sometime…... what a day that will be. I can’t wait, can you?
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Noel Mitaxa 
01/21/22
A descriptive, reflective, and inviting devotional material
Louis Detweiler 
01/22/22
I like the cold, biting air of winter, but only if I know it will end with a warm cup of coffee or tea. This was a reflective piece of writing and I can imagine myself by the seaside in winter.

Just a note of caution. Some sentences were run on sentences. The sentences could have been easily made two sentences with the same clarity.

Good writing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/27/22
This is an interesting testimony. It is definitely on topic. If you tighten it up a bit and do more showing and less telling (for example, make the reader feel the cold air with body language--shivering, pulling coat around body, ducking head into chest to keep neck warm), thoughts, and dialog (whether talking to God or animals or other inanimate objects) could make this story pop even more. Go back and look at how many times you use the word I and then focus on how to restructure half of those sentences a bit. You have an excellent message here, and I could feel your passion. The ending was really profound and made me stop and think. Congratulations on ranking 6th in your level. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
Linda Berg
02/02/22
A challenging perspective for us to have about life here on earth with hopes of eternity in Heaven.

I felt your chill but also the warmth of this message.