The Official Writing Challenge
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Very sad, but powerful. I have a lump in my throat. We forget, as parents, that children are His first...
11/24/06
How incredibly lovely this is. This touched my heart very deeply. Sad but a great reminder on the Source of all life. Great job.
Very moving and beautifully written.
Very well written story and beautiful! I liked the part in the letter abouth Hannah crying out for a baby and then giving him back to God, and how this mother empathised and wanted to be like her. The only thing I would add is showing the emotions of the parents - they must have been devastated but that doesn't quite come through. Other than that, this was great!
11/27/06
That letter had to come from a woman with an enormous amount of faith! The end definitely touched me.
11/29/06
I could definately see someone who loves to write, taking time to write down her thoughts like this mom did. I probably would do something similar in her shoes. You could show more emotion by having the husband choke up a little bit as he reads possibly. Touching story
WOW! Major emotion here, I never dreamed that it was going to turn into a furneral. Good job with this!
11/30/06
oh wow...that's powerful. Though, I do agree with the other reader that the father seems a little detatched from the entire event. This could be fixed by showing him faltering a few times or something along those lines.
Good Job. Very believeable. Another cry-able piece.