The Official Writing Challenge
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12/13/07
I find it cute how she came over her fear for someone else. It was cool. ^-^ & :)
This story has really good content and was interesting to read. I do think you would really benefit from a challenge buddy to help a bit in punctuation, etc. (I know it sure helps me alot.) Anway, keep on writing! You show great potential.
12/17/07
Fun approach to the topic.

I'd have liked a little bit more information so that I could picture the diary-writer: I can't tell if it's male, female, young, old...

Creative entry--thanks!
12/18/07
Wow! What a trip! The part about the snake was especially exciting.
Using a diary is good, perhaps you could have added more descriptions to help the reader picture the setting.
I'm glad you had the chance to go on this trip.
Sounds like an exciting trip. I liked the progression of the main character as near the end they started to think more about others--I would have liked to see even more of that. Good story.