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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Vines (11/21/05)
My Cell…



I feel the cold walls enclosing me. The rusty solid iron door barred me from going outside. The small window with iron grills is too high for me to peek the outside world. There is nothing in this 4mx4m cell but me and a small and dirty mattress. The floor is cold too. The odorous smell from the filthy toilet bowl engulfing the room and I could not do anything but to breath it, however once in awhile fresh air is coming through the small window, so as the light that illumines my cell.

I have been in this cell for just a couple of days now imprisoned for the heinous crime that I did not committed. This cell! - even insects or rats did not want to be in. I am so downed and crashed. I could not imagined how I got in this quagmire. Fear and distress slowly creeping inside me like vines. It twines the remaining hope that I have.

While I am about to break I notice at the corner side of the window a couple of small plants which are vines trying to make their way inside my cell. I stretch my right arm and reach the tip of the vine. It gives me the feeling of hope because it is the only living things that wanted to go inside the cell and be with me. My renewed hope sparks as I waited for the vine to come in completely.

Every time I wake up I could see the vine grows inch by inch and instead of going up it slowly going down inside the cell. It seems that the vine wanted to sympathized with my suffering. The act of waiting for the vine diverted my focus from the feeling of being alone, from fear and from distress.

Then one day the real criminal come out and confess for that heinous crime which mistakenly imprisoned me.

Thanks GOD for the vines.
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Lynn Stevens
11/28/05
This reminds us that wherever we are, there is hope. THank you for this article.
Jan Ackerson
11/28/05
This was very atmospheric and moody--good job! The only problem is with inconsistent tenses. I'd actually like to read more of this story: what was the crime? How did he end up falsely accused? Good job at piquing my interest!
Nina Phillips
11/29/05
They say that happens, that a solitary person makes in-animate objects animate. (hehe)
I liked your story. God bless ya, littlelight
Janice Stotz
12/02/05
Very thought provoking! Work on the grammar and you will be an amazing writer!
Andria Cook
12/02/05
This piece has a lot of potential. There are some grammatic issues to overcome, which with practice and learning I'm sure you will.

However, the idea for the piece is solid. Don't be afraid that just because you are a Christian you have to merely allude to criminal activities. Allow your mind to go there, to concieve the unconcievable.

I know it doesn't sound like fun, and evil is something we as Christian's shy away from. However, as writer's we must allow ourselves to explore this world and write evil in a realistic way.

Good luck with this piece!