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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)
Need an answer you do not know?
To your computer you can go.
Now pick a search engine to use.
There are many from which to choose.
Some like Google and some do not.
Type the question for the answer sought.
Read the info until you find
The answer that you had in mind.
You'll find it sooner or later,
The search engine, an educator.
A wealth of knowledge can be found
With a speed that does astound.
Millions of pages of data base
Are searched for each and every case.

Spiritual knowledge is best found
In the Bible where it abounds.
The best wireless connections of all
Is prayer, when upon the Lord you call.
For God is omniscient, it is true.
To teach and guide, He wants to do.
He is also omnipresent.
Time with Him is always well spent.
Where in the world are answers found?
God's answers are the best around.
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Member Comments
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Date
C D Swanson 
10/22/11
Great Job! Simple, short and powerfully executed! Loved it. God Bless you~
Rachael Severa
10/23/11
I like the comparison approach. Although, nothing compares to the Bible and God.

This is really short and sweet.

Nice poem. Good job. God Bless.
Beth LaBuff 
10/23/11
Your message shines in this delightful poem. My favorite lines, "The best wireless connections of all - Is prayer, when upon the Lord you call." Very nice!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/26/11
This is really sweet. You did a great job nailing the topic. I think a fun poem was quite creative with a nice clear message.
djvenzke Venzke
10/27/11
Good poetry. I feel you nailed the best spiritual search engine, the Bible. Through prayer God's Word directs us to the answers to our personal quests to find God's Will and direction.
Linda Goergen
10/27/11
I have to ditto Beth, she has already put my thoughts down! That was my favorite line too! A lot packed into the few lines of your well written poem! Enjoyed! Good job.
Lillian Rhoades 
10/27/11
You were "on the money" with the topic.:-) Your point of view (message) was direct and clear.

There are weak spots in how the poem was crafted (construction and flow). To give you more knowledgeable hints about how to improve construction and flow of your
poem, I defer to Jan's Writing Basics - a thread on the Forum. Here are a few points she makes:

1)Avoid predictable, forced rhymes (no, go,etc.)

2)Vary your rhyme schemes. Instead of rhyming 1st and 3rd lines, try 2nd and 4th, or other combinations.

You had a few weak areas in your rhythmn. Iloved your conclusion. You started with a question and ended with the answer - the only answer!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
11/05/11
Congratulations for ranking 6th inlevel one!