The Official Writing Challenge
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You have a good rendition here of the Biblical story of Jepththah and his ill-spoken promise to God. What a tragic result for such a sweet victory!

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On the whole, a good job retelling this story.
Indeed, a most bittersweet victory. I remember this story too well and you did good to try to show it in poetry form. Nicely done.
06/10/09
gosh well done !a unknown (to me anyway) bible story brought to life