The Official Writing Challenge
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It's so hard to be a teenager today! You've really captured that well.

I think this wold be more effective it written all in past tense. As is, it jumps about a bit--slightly disorienting to the reader.

You've created some characters that the reader can really care about...good job.
How lucky she is indeed to be brought up knowing God and His ways. I love how she is supportive of her friend, AND she goes to her mom for help, too. I agree with Jan's comment about the tenses, but otherwise a very enjoyable piece.
This is very good! I just kind of wished it was in present tense, or maybe a first person POV, so I could 'get into' the whole story. I'm glad that Robyn had some support from Lisa and wasn't shunned because of what she did.
Aren't friends great? I also moved just before my senior year. I missed my old friends so much!
I would have liked some dialogue between the girls.
Good job...keep writing.