The Official Writing Challenge
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01/10/08
I like the alliteration in your title.

I'd encourage you, when you're editing, to examine each sentence for commonly-used expressions or cliches. I noticed several in this piece--and it's always more interesting to a reader when you find fresh new ways to express these truths.

Thanks for this emotion-rich entry.
01/12/08
Ah... the fellowship of Christian friends!
Details, sometimes tender details, make a story real and help the reader relate. It was hard to get into this without knowing what the molehill problem was.
There's a lot of feeling in this. Keep writing.