The Official Writing Challenge
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09/09/07
Your last line is the key--thank you.

This seems to lack focus--perhaps you could pick just one emotion, and instead of writing generalities (these were a bit redundant), give examples of that emotion, and a lesson for your reader.

A nice start--keep working on this!
09/13/07
You did a good job of describing the emotions of a person when tragedy hits. We all wish we didn't have to go through times like that. I'm glad there are also times of great joy to balance out a few of the tougher moments in life. I agree with Jan your last sentence is key.

Your writing brought to mind this verse: For we do not have a high priest who is unable to sympathize with our weaknesses, but we have one who has been tempted in every way, just as we are—yet was without sin.
Hebrews 4:15 NIV