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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Spring (the season) (07/23/09)
In secret places
Away from the gaze of man
A silent revolution begins

Beneath a distant horizon
A spring dawn creeps out
A little earlier, a little warmer
In a soft blue sky
A pale lemon sun
Stays out beyond the winter curfew

Beneath the dark crumble of earth
Small prison walls break open
A splash of life spills out
Above the hard cold crust
A small green blade
Cuts its way into weak sunshine

Beneath the harsh crackle of bark
Sticky and sweet
A trickle of sap climbs inside
Buds punctuate a branch
Burst and bloom
Green gossamer leaves unfold

Beneath warm wings and soft feathers
A tiny earthquake
Heralds a naked, mewling chick
Desperate hunger
Flings open pale pink beak
Insatiable appetite

Beneath the cosy coverings
Of hats and scarves
I catch the scent of new growth
Discarding the layers
I skip and dance through puddles
And spring rainbows

My world changes
The greyscale days
Surrender to vibrant colours
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Date
Verna Cole Mitchell 
07/30/09
Gorgeous poem.Such beautiful pictures and well chosen words feed this poet's soul.
Lynda Schultz 
07/30/09
I love spring and your poem made me yearn for it to come again.
Linda Payne
08/01/09
Lovely poem. This really captures the beauty and wonder of spring.
Connie Dixon
08/01/09
Loved this! So descriptive!
Ada Nett
08/04/09
hmmmm...for some reason reading this took me back to my vague early childhood memories of spring time in my yard....thanks for the time travel trip!
~Cathy~
Diana Smith 
08/04/09
This was so vibrant, with just the perfect word choices. The colours and sounds fairly leaped off of the screen.
Eliza Evans 
08/05/09
oh my...Took my breath away. AWESOME!!
Bryan Ridenour
08/05/09
WOW. Beautifully descriptive. I loved the phrases "Stays out beyond the winter curfew" and "A tiny earthquake heralds a naked, mewling chick". Nicely done!
Loren T. Lowery
08/05/09
Two simple words: Gorgeous and beautiful!
Sara Harricharan
08/05/09
oh, WOW! Note the capital letters, lol. This is powerfully done. Your words are masterfully chosen and they showcase exactly what I feel spring is. This is a favorite of mine this week! Wonderful writing!
Pamela Kliewer 
08/05/09
Wonderfully written. I'm not a big poetry fan because a lot of the time I can't understand what's being said, but you captured Spring perfectly with this poem.
Mona Purvis
08/05/09
"the greyscale days surrender" Just about perfect.
Mona