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Topic: Exhale (08/15/13)
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TITLE: Exhaling Divorce | Previous Challenge Entry
By lynn gipson
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Holding back my tears discreetly,
Garnering strength to carry on,
Praying in the morning's dawn.
Disappointment fills the heart,
How to end, where to start.
Fear invades with every thought,
Peace of mind cannot be bought.
Warily trudging through this day,
Life's bent arrows sling this way,
Broken heart continues beating,
Beaten soul continues breathing.
Sorrow greets my ground low spirit,
Laughter peals but I can't hear it,
Overwhelmed by such a grief,
Sadly wearing disbelief.
Days go by I'm still inhaling,
Deep inside my heart is failing,
Breathing in, breathing out,
Air with such a dreadful doubt.
My children laugh to keep from crying,
Beneath the laughter they are dying,
What will become of their sweet souls,
Whichever way the court controls.
Victimization claims the child,
Killing feelings soft and mild,
Breaks a tiny gentle heart,
A little life is torn apart.
All I'm breathing is divorce,
Such a hurtful driving force,
Holding pain until I'm pale,
Waiting silently to exhale.
*My son is going through a divorce. I have listened to him and seen every emotion he is going through. This poem is for him.
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The pain and anguish was palpable in every word of this deeply penetrating well written poem.
I'm so sorry for your son's situation.
I believe that God will eventually lift your son from this heap of despair, bringing him "beauty for his ashes." I know he doesn't see it now, but God will bring something good from this sorrow...he always does.
This poem will touch many hearts with its powerful words and sobering message.
Completely moving!
I will keep all of you in prayer.
God bless~
touching I had to say something.
Been where you are. It ain't fun. God will bring peace and healing beyond your wildest imagination. Amen.
Thanks for sharing.
Be mindful of the difference between 'warily' (which means watchfully, cautiously) and 'wearily' (which means tiredly). I think you wanted the latter.
You have a good sense of rhyme and meter, and I'd encourage you to experiment with poem formats that go beyond quatrains with an aabb rhyme scheme. Your talents are ready to stretch!
Thank you for sharing.
Beautifully crafted as usual Lynn, even amidst the pain.
I knew it'd be a winner!
God bless~
Wing His Words
God bless.
Praying for everyone involved.