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Topic: War and Peace (not about the book) (07/07/11)
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TITLE: Eternal War | Previous Challenge Entry
By Carole Robishaw
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I have nothing left to give. Nothing. The war lasted too long, killed or damaged way too many of our men and boys. How are we supposed to rebuild? How can we even survive? The children are the worst, listening to them cry themselves to sleep at night because they are hungry. What am I supposed to do? Is my Ben still alive? Is he walking these roads trying to get home?
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It's been months, now, Lord. Where is my Ben? The weather is turning cold, men are still slowly making their way past. I've dug up every edible root and plant I can find in the fields and woods. I can see Little Ben's bones, he's a walking skeleton, worse even than some of those I see going past.
They keep stopping, asking for handouts, I show them my three hungry children. I share the well with them, I offer a place for them to rest. I wash and bandage their wounds. But I can't feed them.
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Lord, if Ben is still alive, please let the people on his path do at least as much for him as I try to do for those walking past here. Please let him feel your peace after all he's been through. And Lord, please help me find something to eat today. The neighbors boiled their shoes last week. It wasn't enough. We buried them, as you well know. Please Lord, grant us your peace, and help us to survive, or to die quickly. I've already given you back two of my babies. How much more do you want? How much more time can I spend on my knees? Please, Lord, hear me, and help me.
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Lord, tomorrow is Christmas, there is snow coming in through the roof. My precious little Ben hasn't made a sound in hours. I can barely get water down his throat. How much longer do we have to battle the hunger and now the cold. He's the only one I have left. I can't even feel him in my arms any more. He weighs so little a breeze would blow him away. Lord, HEAR ME, please, please, pleaseā¦.
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Rebecca, oh my precious Becky, I'm too late. I tried, but I couldn't travel any faster. I had to keep stopping to aid all those helpless families. Do I have to pay for my helping them with the loss of my own family? Oh, Becky, my love. Becky, please, wake up, please.
Oh, Lord, why couldn't you have given us just another day? Why did you have to take them home? I tried to get here, Lord, you know I did.
Lord, please grant me peace, please help me not to be angry at what was done to us, please, Lord, I can't go on without her. The thought of coming home to my Becky and my three beautiful children was all that kept me going. What do I do now Lord? What do I do? Oh Lord, Lord, why? WHY? Why? Why have you forsaken me?
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Lord, I don't understand, I can't comprehend how it is possible, but I feel your peace. I know you are with me. My family is gone, my home stands in ruins, my land lies fallow, but I will always have you. Thank you, Lord. May I always be your willing servant, no matter the cost. Your Grace is truly amazing.
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The ending was a little abrupt but if you had more words I believe you have the talent to really pack a punch at the end.
Your characters were so real and the dialog believable. The despair of both MCs was palpable. I do like that Ben was able to find some hope and peace. I pray that every soldier and their families find that peace.