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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)
The Defendant -
I petitioned "The Lord" one day
'Please take this habit away - without delay.'

The Crown -
He answered: 'There are matters more pressing.
Remember, I am The Potter - you are the clay.'

The Defendant -
I proceeded to weep; no one loves me -
As far as I can see!

The Crown -
I forfeited my life as love offered -
Nailed to that tree.

The Defendant -
Alas! People portray me as garbage -
Ready for the heap.

The Crown -
With strong rebuke spoke - I didn't create refuse.
I am the "Good Shepherd," you are the sheep.

The Defendant -
But what if I'm not one of the flock?

The Crown -
My Spirit called you ample times
And you didn't take stock.

The Defendant -
I've done much harm to myself and fellow-clan.
I'm conceived as an arrogant madman!

The Crown -
If you forgive the compass within and turn wholly
the other way, the binding chain of guilt will
release and will portray the Son's ray.

The Defendant -
As death's trap door draws near, would you turn
the tide - to undo my crimes.

The Crown -
Remember the thief on the Cross with me?
He had no recourse for good deeds.
A contrite heart was all his need
While I secured his place in eternity.

The Defendant -
The valley of the shadow of death overtakes me!
Could you grant me (as you see our tears)
And lengthen my ill-spent years?

The Crown -
Is not everlasting life, the certainty that nears
Not sufficient to console your earthly fears
And fortify the ones that mourn in tears?

The Defendant -
With my last breath, I confess you as Savior
and Lord then repent of my wayward behavior.

The Crown -
The judge finds you 'not guilty.'
Witnessed by the tree that tried my Son.
Your new life has just begun.
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Lollie Hofer 
10/21/10
Very unique perspective. I enjoyed the dialogue between God and man. I liked the titles you gave them, especially The Crown.
Jeanne E Webster
10/21/10
Good take on the sinner's repentance. You gave it a new twist; very interesting. Well written with only a few punctuation nicks here and there. Blessings :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/22/10
Nicely done. It had a nice old English yet still modern feel. I had a vivid picture of the courtroom and the defendant.
Jan Ackerson
10/26/10
I like the courtroom metaphor very much.

Your meter was 'off' in a few places; smoothing that out would really elevate this moving poem.

I'd like to hear this read aloud, with the two distinct voices--that'd be really effective!