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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Fearful (08/23/07)
A child sees the sky and wonders
Does God really see me here?
He walks along the railroad track
And prays a simple prayer.

His sister skips a rope nearby
Does God really see her there?
She plays beside the flower box
She prays a simple prayer.

His mother works in the kitchen
Does God really see her there?
She cooks on top the Kenmore stove
She prays a simple prayer.

His father fights in land away
Does God really see him there?
He walks along the dusty trail
He prays a simple prayer.

His pastor comes to their cottage
Does God really see him there?
He brings the word of Jesus life
He prays a simple prayer.

A child hears the word and wonders
Does God really see us here?
He cries and fears a lonely world
He prays a simple prayer.

Jesus hears the lone crying child
For God really sees him there
He soothes the fear with love so true
He answers fearful prayer.
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Member Comments
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Date
Dolores Stohler 
08/30/07
This poem is lovely with a childlike sweetness. I felt a kind of serenity as I read it. Very nice!
Kathy Bruins
08/31/07
This is a very nice poem that shows the love and compassion the Lord has for his people.
Gabrielle Morgan
08/31/07
What a sweet poem! The wonder of a child - I think your poem achieved this. Good work.
Jan Ackerson
08/31/07
Lovely, simple, sweet.
Mark Bell
09/01/07
Very nice. Holds the attention, and yet communicates the child like wonder of the questions. The contrasting images were well done.
Marilyn Schnepp 
09/02/07
A sweet poem with many great thoughts. Nicely done.
Dee Yoder
09/03/07
This is a tender, lovely poem. Comforting and warm-hearted!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
09/03/07
I love the ending to your sweet poem. God does see.
Jacquelyn Horne
09/03/07
Good poetry. Yes, God really sees us there.
christine bastow
09/04/07
Very nice. Chris x
Kristen Hester
09/05/07
I really like this. It has such a nice, pleasant flow. It would be a wonderful illustrated book. Good job.
LaNaye Perkins
09/05/07
I love the message in this poem.
Julie Moore
09/05/07
Such a comforting poem. Flows very well. My favorite line, "He soothes the fear with love so true
He answers fearful prayer." Oh how true. Great Poem Dub.
George Parler 
09/06/07
The message and writing are both wonderful. I see something that has several faces. Depending on how the reader interprets. Well done.
Pat Guy
09/07/07
Did you intentionally use the word 'me' for some reason in the first syanza and not follow through with that particular POV with the rest of the poem? I don't know ... it seems there is a POV shift somewhere in the beginning two stanza's and I'm not sure which one is the right one! haha

Are we supposed to guess at the meaning of this one because everybody is 'wondering' and 'praying' yet God hears the sincere heart of the child. (?)
Linda Watson Owen
09/08/07
This is sooo precious, dub! I do love the simple, childlike quality that you've been able to capture here. Simple style, deep truth. Lovely indeed!