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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Melody (08/24/06)
Timpani

The orchestra has assembled on this hill.
The soloist is persuasive,
sections bow in and out
in surges that touch and embrace.
Until that moment,
springing like an ambush,
a discordant note stresses the ear,
smacks of sound waves,
shocks of anxious tones.
It is not a clamour of clanging gongs
a smash of clattered cymbal
or a triangle out of tune
that distresses this melody.
It is not a percussive clout
hammer upon passive nail
jarred into submissive wood.
Neither do the wailing women
steal the musicality
within this orchestral life-song.
The flowing air becomes crimson passion
a sensational tide of emotion
breaching senses, drawing tears.
Then a solitary missed mark
steals the moment.

The contaminator of this chorale,
the pilferer of peace
within the absorbing harmonies
of graceful crescendo
the out of place note
is mine.
I turned away
when the conductor pointed
my opportunity to contribute
where only I could fill that space
and a cock crowed in my stead.
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Joanne Sher 
09/03/06
A lovely little piece! Enjoyed it.
Marilyn Schnepp 
09/04/06
From the little bits and pieces of Free Verse that I can comprehend, I believe this is a beautiful concept of Jesus' trial and death. The words "cock crowing" clued me in to this assumption. If only I had the time and the smarts to piece together each and every line into one thread...I know I'd love this story. Thanks.
Sharlyn Guthrie
09/06/06
Your imagery is very good and your words flow like a beautiful tune in a minor key. The message is powerful!
Anne Linington
10/25/08
AS someone who enjoys music- choral singing rather than orchestral playing, I really appreciated this poem; The ending was unexpected, although I half-anticipated the Calvary connection. Excellent.