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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Grrr! (01/28/10)
A CAMPING TRIP TO REMEMBER

My daughter and her husband decided to go camping one beautiful Missouri weekend. He was attending the Seminary at St. Louis, using a local Seminary Student’s advise, They headed out to the campground Friday evening.

It was dark when they arrived at the campground. There were no lights at all so JoAnne and Grant knew this was an unimproved park, but they found a place with a table and a fire pit so they decided to camp there.

They began by trying to light their gas lantern, but it wouldn’t light so they put up their tent using the car lights.

The tent was up and the two of them began talking about where the outhouse would be.

“It must be pretty close, They wouldn’t put it too far away from the camping spots, would they? Let’s go find it,” suggested JoAnne,

They started off armed with a small flashlight. They finally found, not one, but two outhouses, one for the girls and one for the boys. JoAnne took the flashlight and went into the girls outhouse leaving Grant to manage by himself in the dark.

JoAnne dropped the flashlight into the hole! It wasn’t exactly what she wanted to tell friend husband when she came out. Now, what to do? It was very dark all around them, dark, that is, except for the steady gleam that came from the hole in the girls outhouse.

Grant thought he had a pole or something in the car which would work to get the flashlight out. However, finding their campsite in the dark without a flashlight could be a problem.

They did though and they even found their way back to the offending flashlight with the pole. They began digging around in the hole and finally got the flashlight out.

“Well, now we have to find the water pump to wash things out,” said JoAnne.

Grant was too frustrated to answer.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/05/10
Very funny. I can just imagine the horror of fishing out the flashlight! Eeww and Grrr!
Gregory Kane
02/07/10
You've got a good story here. It just needs some developing to bring out some of the emotions - the frustration, the fear, the embarrassment, the whole yuck factor.
Can I suggest that you read through a selection of entries from Masters and Advanced to give you a feel for how other people develop the emotional side to a story. That's all part of the joy of learning together at FaithWriters
Ruth Brown
02/07/10
The kind of thing one fears happening, happened. Cute story.
AnneRene' Capp
02/08/10
Ah, the reality of life!

You gave me a good chuckle and was glad it wasn't me :)
Virgil Youngblood 
02/10/10
This gives a whole new meaning to "something to pray over." What a fun read. I'll bet it ends up in a sermon some day. Thanks for sharing.
harvestgal Ndaguba
02/10/10
A fun read. Would have loved it to be a little longer to bring out more. Think I would have left that flashlight in the hole. Yuk. But I could really imagine what was happening.