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TITLE: A Child Just Like Them | Previous Challenge Entry
By LaNaye Perkins
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When daylight finally came, so did disappointment. For up the dirt road came her cousin Annie, and she was riding Babe! Sarah was fuming. She knew Annie and her folks had come to visit Grandma. She hadn’t expected that skunk to pull a stunt like this, though. That is when a plan started to form in her young brain, one she would need some help to pull off. Her brother’s eyes gleamed mischievously as he listened to Sarah’s scheme for revenge.
Annie trotted up to the farm house feeling pretty smug about getting Babe before Sarah had a chance to catch her. Little did she know what she was in for. She knew Sarah loved Babe and that is why she made sure she caught her first. They had butted heads before, and this time around she aimed to get the best of Sarah. With a smile of smug satisfaction she told Sarah that she would have to share Babe with her today. That, in fact, she would have to take equal turns riding or they would have to ride double.
Annie didn’t a have clue to what she was in for. The two very sweetly said they’d be happy to play together. In fact, they could go play on the deer trails up in the woods and have all kinds of fun! Annie felt like she was controlling it all, rudely ordering her two cousins about while they played. Yes, she was pretty impressed with herself.
At least she was until they got about a mile away from the farm, where no one could hear. Then with a wink to James, Sarah asked if Babe was limping. Protesting, Annie said there was nothing wrong with Babe, she was walking fine. It took some convincing from the two to finally get Annie to slide off Babe so they could check her hoof.
Then, as soon as Annie’s feet touched the ground, Sarah and James dug heel and took off at a dead run, leaving Annie to walk back to Grandma’s alone. She had figured out too late that she’d been tricked by those two rascals she called cousins.
Sitting high upon a ridge the two laughed with delight as they watch Annie stomping back to Grandma’s house in a fit. Sarah felt a twinge of guilt, but brushed it off, by reminding herself that it was all Annie’s fault anyway. They stayed out in the woods until Annie and her folks were long gone. Yes indeed, the two were pretty pleased with themselves. That is, until they got home.
Daddy was waiting on them when they got back to do their chores. One look at his face and they both knew they were headed to the woodshed. Of course they knew they had it coming. Daddy and Momma had always taught them to live by the Bible and treat folks right. Both of them knew they had done Annie wrong, so there was no need making excuses for it.
Later that night, after doing her chores and nursing a tender backside Sarah whispered to her brother: “Ya know James, I’m a tryin’ to feel bad about leavin’ Annie out there in the woods like that. But, if’n I had to do it all over again, I’d still leave that little skunk out in the woods for trying to steal my favorite horse!”
Just outside their window sat their Daddy who couldn’t help but grin and shake his head. Silently he prayed “Lord, please help us to bring these two children up right, so when they get older they can follow the right path too. And Lord, maybe you could bless them each with a child of their own down the road.... a child just like them!”
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Quite a bit of narration here...I'd suggest adding dialogue, and I echo the POV suggestions above me.
These naughty children were definitely made real to your readers.
Elizabeth Burton