The Official Writing Challenge
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03/18/22
I really enjoyed reading your creative story. You captured many emotions of the main character very well...discouragement, disillusionment, frustration and sorrow at injustice. There was conflict. I was with you the whole way. I can see it as the beginning of a novel.
Beautifully written. As in a life without the Savour, the ending is unknown.
03/21/22
Excellent story, as you took Edward from childlike innocence into manhood. Yes, if God so prompts you, please do turn this into a novel. Or a longer short story for a magazine.
Wow this is riveting from beginning to end. You did an outstanding job of bringing characters to life. The body language and dialog pulled me right in and the different conflicts helped build the suspense. This is one of my all-time favorites. Congratulations on ranking 12 overall. (I'm surprised it didn't rank higher because it's outstanding.) Happy Dance!