The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/23
I enjoyed the story. Your turn. Was an interesting take on the topic. Good job.
01/29/23
I’m sorry for the typo. I have a shortcut for a game that I play with my sister and that I accidentally typed which put the words “your turn” instead of the word “it.”
I really enjoyed this story. It could be even more powerful if you work on showing not telling. Gold and Platinum members can get the book Bring Your Writing to Life for free. You just need to write and ask. I think this book would really help you. I was confused why suddenly it switched to the Bible verse, but if you transitioned this as part of the MC's thoughts, it would make sense and help the flow. I really like the message in this thought-provoking piece. It's perfect, especially in today's world. With some tweaking, I could see this piece in a magazine for recovering readers.