The Official Writing Challenge
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There's a lot here. You may think of narrowing the focus. Thanks for sharing. Blessings
You did a lot of retelling here and did a nice job, but it feels like reading a synopsis. Don't be afraid to focus on one part of a Bible story and bring it to life by telling it from a fresh POV. I'm not sure I remember seeing either word bye or buy and it didn't seem to be the central theme of the story. You've some great potential for bringing Bible stories to life and it is nice to read them and for people who might not be familiar with them.