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This story was heartbreaking. Well told, it is one to think about over and over, long after the words have faded in my mind. Your descriptions are perfect for this story. Such sympathy it evokes!
02/15/19
Immensely powerful story.
Loved the scriptures at the end.

God bless~
This is so sad. Your descriptions are beautiful. You made me see it, which is what a good story teller does. Thumbs up!
02/16/19
Good job at creating the character's mood and thoughts.
I was a little confused during the description. I thought she was outside, but the ceiling fan didn't fit that thought. (btw - You didn't finish one sentence...typo, I'm sure.)
Well done.
What a sad, sensitive piece. All the more so because thousands of girls face this every day, with little hope of better things to come. I love the way you gave voice to her thoughts and though there wasn't a major change at the end, it was the "baby steps" toward the help she needed. Very, very well done!
02/17/19
Sad story. I am confused as to where Shelly is staying- a hotel? Why would the pink sheets work out? Why would they not provide food?
02/17/19
Sad story. I am confused as to where Shelly is staying- a hotel? Why would the pink sheets work out? Why would they not provide food?
02/17/19
This story makes a person want to sit with the Shellys out there and try to help and comfort them. So many need a safe place to talk, and this story reminds us of that.
02/18/19
This is such an excellent piece of writing. I loved it, from beginning to end! Your descriptions are amazing, and I could close my eyes and picture Shelly.
This is a powerful story. You have some great descriptions here. The Shelly's fear of the shelter is palpable as is the pain from her years of abuse. You did a fine job.
Congratulations on ranking 22 overall. Happy Dance!