The Official Writing Challenge
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05/23/16
red ink: sneaking out OF A NIGHT was very awkward. Also, there was a place you changed verb tenses. That said, this was a rather humorous story, and very creative.
05/25/16
This was clever and entertaining. One suggestion I have is to use more showing instead of telling.
God Bless
05/26/16
Great job!

Blessings~