The Official Writing Challenge
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Such a good biblical example of the topic
Well done
Blessings
This is a great retelling of a familiar Bible story. You really bring the characters to life. Instead of using taglines like yelled, retorted, and demanded, keep it simple, or even better use body language to paint a picture and show who is speaking. You did a nice job of pulling me in, writing on topic, and having a clear purpose.