The Official Writing Challenge
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You make some good points. I'm not sure I totally agree with everything, but parts were difficult to understand because of the wording. I'd urge you to ask someone to read your pieces aloud to you and note where they stumble, then tweak those lines. Also make sure you put the Bible verses in quotation marks to show it is a direct quote. I could see this as an interesting sermon outline. You have some great messages. It took me a second to understand the TV analogy, but when I did, I thought it quite clever. You also attacked the topic in a different way.