The Official Writing Challenge
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A relevant story for this theme. All the best.
This is a great retelling of Peter's story. I enjoyed it and it pulled me in. I'm not sure the title fits the entire story and I'm terrible at titles, but you want one that will make the reader want to read it. Off the top of my head, The Great Escape might be more riveting. I was also jarred by the phrase with Kool-aid in it. It just didn't feel like it fit. I appreciate trying to make the dialog interesting, but stay true to your characters. You did a great job of writing on topic and had a clear message with an enjoyable read.