The Official Writing Challenge
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This is interesting and has a lot of potential. Right now, you are just telling the stories. Instead paint a picture for the reader. Show the pain, fear, and thought processes to pull the reader in. You have some great examples of faith but were limited by your word limit. Perhaps by tightening the beginning and perhaps just focus on one of the stories you could do more with it. You've a great start and some really interesting details. I'm eager to learn more about these people.