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Topic: BLIND (06/03/21)
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TITLE: The Blind Woman and Mrs Valdi | Previous Challenge Entry
By Avigail David
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She hangs a sign that reads, “Please, help me, I’m blind. Thank you.” In her hand, she holds a square tin that has a handle on it. Coins jingle, not very many—but there are a few-- cling-clang in her tin. She shakes her tin calling attention.
A passer walks by here and there. It’s busy on a bright, sunny weekday. Many walk by busily, hurriedly or just pass by the poor blind woman. She hears coins drop in a few times.
On this busy day, Mrs. Valdi takes notice of poor blind woman. Her heart-- yes, Mrs Vali’s heart-- is greatly moved.
“I feel sorry for this poor old woman. She looks very sad and needy. It makes me want to pour out tears for her. I wish I could do or say something that would make this poor, blind woman smile. How happy can she be sitting here all alone getting pennies, dimes, nickels and quarters and an occasional dollar?”
Mrs Vali studies the situation. She gives it some thinking. An idea pops up. “Hmmm! This woman is blind, so she can’t know how much money she receives. I will give her a dollar and tell this poor, blind woman that it’s $100 bill. She’ll be so thrilled. That smile on her face will turn into happiness all day long!”
“Oh, hello, there!” Mrs Valdi calls out to the blind woman. “I carry a lot of cash with me. I’m sure you’d like a $100 bill.”
The blind woman opens her hand wide for the dollar bill. She clasps it and holds it close to her chest. She’s blind, so she doesn’t know it’s a dollar.
“Oh, Thank you! Thank you! THANK YOU! I’ve never received so much money ever before!” the blind woman exclaims, smiling so big and wide. Unashamed of her two front teeth that have fallen a long time ago.
“Wow!” Mrs Valdi says to herself, “I’m making this blind woman happy. She’s all smiles. If one dollar she thinks it’s $100 brings so much joy, how much joy two will bring!”
“Tell you what, sister,” Mrs. Valdi says. “I just happen to carry with me money and I will give another $100 for you to keep.”
The blind woman faces the heavens and thanks Mrs, Valdi, praises God for the lucky day she’s having.
“Okay, I must get going now and must be on my way. And you’re welcome,” Mrs Valdi smiles about her wonderful deed of making someone happy today. She struts on the busy sidewalk with her heart brimming.
The blind woman settles down from so much excitement and calls it a day. “I won’t need to collect any more. I now have more than enough.” She’s humming as she’s heading back to her home.
Suddenly, the blind woman says to herself, “I’m going to have my teeth repaired. It’s time to get some dentures on my front teeth. And get a job at the florist. I can pay with my two $100 bills. Yes, I’ll do that!
Asking for directions from people along the way, she finds a dental clinic. Another lucky day-- they have a slot for her.
“I’m paying with cash.” “Here you go, Doctor, $200, exactly! I have two $100 bills a rich passerby gave me.”
The kind Owner-Dentist lays the bills on a desk, and sets to work on the blind woman’s mouth.
Whirrr. Sickle. Probe. Drill. Scale. Suction. Lastly, the mold for the blind woman’s new dentures to fill in the gaps in her mouth.
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The blind woman is proud of herself. Showing all teeth-- with her new look and new teeth-- and thinking of exciting prospects of facing a new job--selling flower.
As gracious as he can, Dentist asks, “Ma’m, what made you say that you had $200?”
“Oh, a rich passerby gave me two $100 bills. She said so herself.” The blind woman is thinking of Mrs Valdi.
Dentist calls the police outside. He explains privately. The officers investigate the clinic’s receipts and records. No anomalies. No fraud from neither, Dentist nor the blind woman.
Everyone’s in delightful wonder!
All good! As if Heaven came down to earth, not only on the blind woman’s smiles.
Whatever has happened there. The smiling blind woman heads back to her home ready for a new day tomorrow at the florist.
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Hunched over on the bench, she sits expressionless, staring straight into nothingness. Her clouded eyes hidden behind a pair of darkened glasses. Her tattered clothing looked as if they had been worn for weeks, or maybe longer.
Before you submit, search your draft for times when you name emotions, then edit to show instead of tell.
Hunched over on the bench, she sits expressionless, staring straight into nothingness. Her clouded eyes hidden behind a pair of darkened glasses. Her tattered clothing looked as if they had been worn for weeks, or maybe longer.
Before you submit, search your draft for times when you name emotions, then edit to show instead of tell.
Mrs Valdi missed out on those wonderful opportunity, she was so blinded by her own self-rigorousness and lying to the poor blind woman.
The blind woman's character profile in this narrative piece was deliberately not stereotyped as, "hunched, haggard, dirty, crest-fallen etc..."
Again, thank you for your suggestions.Blessings!
Blessings!