The Official Writing Challenge
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I like this a lot--it's creative and unique. I wonder if it would be even more effective if it ended at "Exactly." Let your readers draw the inevitable conclusion. I know a lot of teens like Meagan, so I appreciated the hope here.
A lot of good things going on here, although the ending was rushed. Thanks for sharing this interesting article.
You've got the typical rebellious teenager down pat! - almost as if you've "Been There/Done that"; and the two Critiques prior to mine? Also typical. One says "end it at the word "exactly", and the other says the ending was rushed. What's a Writer to do? Do it Your way...and thanks for sharing this story.
Wonderful teaching story for teens. Would make a good devotional intro. Very nicely written.:0)
I love it! Seems like we've all been that house at some point in our lives...let's face it we're all under construction.