The Official Writing Challenge
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Good writing. Really like the title. I think this was a good exercise in exorcising that left over pain of a first love/broken heart.
Well written. Reminds me of the broken hearts that the teens in my youth group experience.
You told a good story about the tenderness of young love and the pain of a broken heart. Your dialog was convincing and I could easily picture the characters.
I loved the gentle idiocy of the counting in Spanish - so wonderfully naive and oh so believable. Many a broken heart...
Good work in developing the personalities of your characters. By the end, I could feel Nola's heartbreak because you were able to pull your reader into the intrigue and delight of the romance.