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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)
From: punkedhead

To: weirdanime

Subject:

Date: Sunday, April 4, 20xx 11:32:54 am

babys finally asleep so im writing while i can.

hi. the last weeks been sooooo crazy lol*. first the doctor tells me its false labour pains then i go to the hospital anyway & i go into laboru right there DOES THAT EVER HURT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! they gave me somehting for the pain but it mad eme os sleepy i cant rember most of it. maybe i shd a had that abortion like cindy siad but whatever. i was so lonly in the hospitaal just me & the baby & the nurses teaching me how to look after it. babys r soGROSS they poop they pee they barf o ya they cry alot to. im so tired.

i didnt knwo what i was gonna do after i got out of the hospital cause my folks dont want a baby their real mad @ me but grampa joe & gramma meg visited & said i cd stay @ there place & thats ok by me. thats were i am now they let me use there computer & stuff there cool that way. tehy let me use there spare room thats where baby is sleeping rite now.

gramma meg wants me to name the baby idk i cant name it afte r jerkface greg he took off asoon as he found out i was preg moron!! grampa joe says i shd go back to school as soon as i feel up to it but i dont wanto gregs there & stuff I HATE HIS GUTS!!!!!!!!!!

gramma& grampa wnet to chrch this am so im alone i got the tv going so its not so quiet or anything thye say they r praying for me but idk theres no hope ofr me here but i cant leave baby im so confused.

o i hear baby got to go dont get preg whatever u do kk? rofl cya


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No virus found in this incoming message.
Checked by MVB.
Version: 1.2.555/ Virus Database: Merf X503.55.3 - Release Date: 3/28/2008 10:58 AM
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*internetspeak key:
lol = laugh out loud
idk = I don't know
kk = emphatic okay
rofl = roll on floor laughing
cya = see you
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Member Comments
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Date
Lynn Smith
04/10/08
Cool story. You really got into the mind of a teenage girl. Great going.
Christine Dunn
04/10/08
Very good. I'd love to know what happened next - How did her grandparents' attitudes and beliefs change her thoughts about her baby? This would be great if it was extended a little.
Beth LaBuff
04/10/08
I like that you stayed in "email character" by not using capital letters to begin sentences and you used symbols like "&". Then I love your "no virus message" -- making this very authentic looking. :) It was probably a good thing you gave us a Key at the bottom. Your message is sad. I'm so glad the grandparents in your story were there.
Dianne Janak
04/10/08
This was touching, real, sad, and yet comforting to know she will be in good hands with grandma.. very realistic... loved the MC ...poor baby...
Joshua Janoski
04/14/08
This story was sad, and yet it had me laughing a lot. I think it's because I work in the computer field, and I have seen more than my share of these types of e-mail messages.

I too enjoyed the anti-virus message at the bottom .It really made this look like a real e-mail. You did a wonderful job with this very unique entry. :)
Beckie Stewart
04/14/08
This was an interesting read and sad too. I would like to know more about what happened with this young girl and her baby.