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Topic: Home Group (11/29/07)
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“Tom, it’s me, Steven.”
“Steven, how are things going for tonight? I was just saying to Judy I’m looking forward to you leading the study.”
“That’s why I called. We won’t be there. Suzie’s mother has taken ill and she’s been rushed to the hospital. They think it’s a heart attack and Suzie could be with her all night. The children haven’t had their baths yet and I just burnt the dinner. Half the wall above the stove is going to need a clean. Hannah’s crying because her doll lost its head and Stevie just ran over Molly’s fingers with his trike and... ”
“Whoa there, Brother. Sounds like you need some prayer,” Tom replied, tilting the telephone receiver for Judy to hear.
“That’s for sure. I have four very unhappy kids here and things are getting kind of desperate. I’m not sure how Suzie copes on her own during the day with four babies under five. She’s been gone half an hour and... Yes, I could do with some prayer.”
“Steven, you need more than prayer. Look, there’s only going to be the Millers and the Jessop’s here tonight due to all the Christmas functions going on. How about I call them and we’ll all head over there and help out. When the children are asleep, we’ll spend some time in prayer for Suzie’s mother as well. Wait... Judy’s giving me a signal here... We’ll bring our dinner over and something extra. We’ll come early and I’ll call the others from there.”
“I don’t know what to say, Tom.”
“That’s what our home group is all about, Steven.”
“Thanks.”
“It’s interesting how tonight’s topic was The Good Samaritan.”
“Yes, except now it’ll be a practical lesson. I’d better go, Tom. Sally needs her diaper changed.”
“OK, Steven. We won’t be long. The Samaritans are on their way."
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Prayer is extremely important, but works best when practical help is applied also.
You get my (unqualified) vote...good job.
Ya gotta love, home groups...
Laury
If you even expand this (and I hope you do), it'd be great to have a few more narrative sentences in addition to the conversation, to really put the reader "on the scene".