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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)
VALENTINE

No diamond I would give you
Could throw a greater shine
To match the beaming sparkle
That lights this heart of mine.

Your eyes like rays of crystal
Dance the prism bar
And form a throw of color
That reaches to my heart.

No string of pearls that I could find
To grace about your neck
Could top the bounding luster
Your very life reflects.

No ring of gold or silver
I place upon your hand
Would herald your royal nature
That makes me stand a man.

No flowers I could send you
Could fill the very air
With sweeter fragrant odor
Than the love you always share.

No box of candy lush and sweet
Could beat your hug and kiss
That satisfies my craving
And makes my life a bliss.

You’re a living valentine
That’s all that I can say
So every moments special
With my valentine every day.
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Member Comments
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Date
Joy Faire Stewart
05/24/07
Love the line..."you're a living Valentine." Any lady would be happy to receive a poem like this.
Julie Arduini
05/25/07
This was written by a great writer and romantic. I absolutely loved it!
(Treava) Joyce Pool
05/25/07
Someone is a very fortunate lady. :)
Marilyn Schnepp 
05/25/07
A beautiful little poem and So well stated. The rhythm is off a bit in the last verse...but still I thought it lovely.
Rita Garcia
05/25/07
Chariming...love it!!!
Rhonda Clark
05/26/07
Great tribute to a love. Makes me think of my husband. Fantastic.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
05/26/07
A delightful way to serenade your love!
Jacquelyn Horne
05/26/07
Wonderful tribute to the one you love.
Benjamin Graber
05/30/07
Absolutely beautiful! this is one of my favorites, out of all that I've read this week. That first stanza is excellent!
Benjamin Graber
05/30/07
One thought for critique: the rhymes in that last line sound a bit forced - the line "That's all that I can say" sounds a bit like it was thrown in just because it rhymes. I don't think you really need the last stanza - the stanzas before it express all you need to say!
Great poem, I really enjoyed it.